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Paragraph 1 They all had personal and group problems, as a team and as individuals. Oscar Vazquez wanted a career in the military but ran into some problems when he went to a meeting to become a soldier. The team also ran into the problem of not having enough money for the robot and had to keep a tight budget for materials. In paragraph 15 it explains that Oscar Vazquez’s parents brought him to the U.S. from Mexico without proper paper work, not allowing him to receive a scholarship, nor get into the military. This is an obstacle because he was kept from fulfilling his dream. It stopped or was in the way of him doing what he wanted to do all his life. This causes him to think of another career he could be in and find something else to do,…

me feel giddy like a little girl on Christmas morning. The way Andy Stone started off his speech talking about Christmas first had me questioning his thought process, but after he made it flow into the rest of his introduction, which lead him into his body points about Science-Fiction. He also had a great thesis that helped the receivers understand what his speech was going to be about. Not only does Andy make this a beneficial informative speech with specific examples and statistics, but with…

half-sisters she’s never met and begins to rediscover and acknowledges both sides of her of herself, her “American” identity and her “Chinese” identity. By accepting her cultural identity, June has achieved happiness. Happiness can be defined by feeling content with one’s identity such as how June is content with being a Chinese American. With Tan’s use of diction, pauses between paragraphs, imagery, and organization; the novel neatly concludes with the connection of each short story to the…

should not send it by email immediately upon leaving the interview. On the flip side, the candidate should not wait until a week later hwen the employer has probably already chosen someone else. The person should send the letter one to two days after the interview and not any later than that. Forty-eight hours past the interview is just the perfect amount of time for the information to grab hold of the prospective employer and move that organization in a positive direction. The Right Way to…

to describe my strengths as a writer. I believe that I am good at structuring my writing in the form of paragraph placement and the sections in each body paragraph. An adequate example is in my second essay about wrongful births. I organized that essay by beginning each body paragraph with a common stereotype, such as “ ‘Raising a disabled child is a burdensome venture,’ some supporters of wrongful birth suits may contend.” Then, I would usually insert a quote from Purdy’s text, followed by…

present…are inaccessible, but all natural objects make a kindred impression” (2), Emerson makes a point that the beauty of nature surrounds men, yet many fail to see the obvious examples because they are too distracted by society. The phrase “[the stars give] their admonishing smile” (1), personifies Nature. Emerson means that while many fail to see the beauty of nature around them, it is still on Earth and is waiting for people to finally recognize its natural beauty. Emerson characterizes…

bit scattered and doesn 't feel like it is in order. Your paragraph about his information is fine but I think it needs to be orangized. Does the writer introduce the article’s name, the author’s name, and the main point/argument of the article? Is it effective? Yes, this part was very clear. It 'll be nice is his essay was illtiaze; but, it 's fine so far. Just try and add more details on the suthor themselves, In the thesis, does the writer argue whether the argument is developed…

privileged kids rule high school, stepping over tons of ‘nerdy’ kids in the process”. While this statement adds some detail, it isn’t enough to conjure up a specific image for most readers. In your feedback, you suggested that I start with a specific film image, which I felt would really help keep the reader’s attention by referencing something relevant to them. I decided to explore a specific movie – “Mean Girls” – and reworked my introduction’s organization, starting the essay off on a more…

The author of Document 2 organizes his argument into four paragraphs each containing a different supporting piece of evidence. On the other hand, Document 1 is high unorganized in structure, the examples are repetitive and unclear. The organization of Document 2 makes its argument much stronger and easier to follow than Document 1. Another strength in Document 2 is its author’s use of reliable sources. The author of Document 2 cites sources such as the Geneva Centre on Housing Rights and…

Prezi. She provided me with a typed page of questions that she had used in past semesters, but she said that I did not have to use all of them. I mentioned that I would give the students instructions on the question sheet that would state that they were expected to write in complete sentences and to form the best answer possible without taking the information word for word from the websites. She thought that it was not necessary for them to write in complete sentences and they could just jot…