Instructions: Please answer each question in detail. I expect at least three to four sentences per question.
Does the author present the issue in his or her introduction? Suggestions?
I think their intro is pretty decent. It starts off qith a questions then goes on to answer them. Starting off with a catching question is a good start in my book.
Does he start from general information and move to specifics? Suggestions?
I believe so. They starts off with a broad " you shouldn 't eat meat" kinda topic but shows why a vegetable life style might be a profitable one. However, I would like to see some outside sources of the author. I would like to know a little more about Laurel Gladden and what their …show more content…
It feels a bit scattered and doesn 't feel like it is in order. Your paragraph about his information is fine but I think it needs to be orangized.
Does the writer introduce the article’s name, the author’s name, and the main point/argument of the article? Is it effective?
Yes, this part was very clear. It 'll be nice is his essay was illtiaze; but, it 's fine so far. Just try and add more details on the suthor themselves,
In the thesis, does the writer argue whether the argument is developed well/effective/convincing, rather than the argument itself? Suggestions?
I feel like there is not a clear thesis. There is clear topic sentence but the thesis needs some work. It needs more a firm stances on why they support the author. It feels mor elike a run-on sentence than a thesis. Does the writer argue about the how effective the argument is rather than agree or disagree with the point? Please provide specific feedback about the thesis.
It is effective, they do explain their reason on why they support the author. In a strange way they should shorten a bit. Try and cut down your thesis to clearer points or add some …show more content…
Yes, I do like how simple and straight-forward the topic sentences. I do believe they needs two quotes to futher support their topic sentences. Other than that, good jon.
Is there clear and strong analysis after each quote? Suggestions?
Basically, but I do think they really need more quotes. All of paragraphs are really well concrete with the topic setences, though they needs to add some concluding sentences. Also, please add more quotes.
Does the writer explain why he or she chose this particular quote? Does the explanation connect back to the thesis? Does it all connect back to the idea of the argument being effective and convincing or not? Please provide specific feedback about the paragraph development.
This goes with concluding sentences and needs more explaintion per quote. Some paragraphs only came with one sentences after the quote. Needs some major inflation.
Does the writer have a conclusion that restates the thesis and gives a final thought? Please provide specific feedback about the conclusion and its