Reflective writing as a genre allows for a combination of personal reflection and critical thinking all intertwined into one. I turned my reflection essay into a new reflection that focused on a different level of the education system that would allow for me to reflect on my first semester of college to back up my allegations against the school system. When attempting to revise my essay in a new way I reread my old one and found an interesting theme screaming out of the paper. It was saying, “high school and Regents did not prepare me for college.” I took the idea a little further and expanded it to the SAT, that is a similar testing style to Regents, that similarly did not prepare me for college, and through research I found that income status and education zones play a major role in what type of educations individuals receive. From reading up on this topic I concluded that I was deprived of the proper education and was ill prepared for college, and when I got here it was nothing as expected. This writing style allowed for my open opinion and comparison of my own story to the information I found through research, allowing for a reflective narrative to be told. Through this form of writing my personality and voice is able to shine in a way that it couldn’t have in any other form, it allowed for my emotion to be visible and relatable. The radical revision was thinking about the topic of education and how it not only fails the society, but the person in the system. These test programs and schools are failing people and making them feel a sense of helplessness. They are in a race ill prepared and when they feel they can’t tackle one obstacle they quit, and are left with the short end of the stick of being uneducated. The reflective style brings together all forms of writing. In a reflection it is possible to review a topic by expressing an opinion and analyze a topic all at once summing everything up. The first time around I got a great grade on it because I was very passionate and informed on the subject I was talking about because it was personal to me, so it was easy for me to reflect on it once again. On the other hand I turned my review into an analytical essay.
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The review I originally wrote was all over the place and my ideas were not developed. I talked about the terrible service I received at fast food restaurants, health risk, the benefits of home cooked meals, and advertisements in store, while mildly breezing over the marketing tactics of these companies that keep consumers coming back. I received a bad grade obviously because my ideas were all over and not focused on one specific fast food restaurant through a review of it and incorporating my own opinion in a developed manner. The writing style of a review limits the argumentative style essay that I originally wrote, so I decided to radically revise it by developing one of the ideas I never expanded prior and did a lot of research on it. I chose to turn this essay into an analytical essay because it allows me to formulate my own opinion while using outside sources. The ideas that interested me the most was how do these fast food chains as a whole keep people coming back, and what is the number one heath risk that they lead to. Doing this incorporated ideas from my original paper into the new one, through expansion on a specific aspect of the fast food industry, and one cause and effect module. This new piece allowed for me to expand my ideas and focus on the specific sectors of individuals who are directly targeted through fast food companies marketing style. This made the topic more personalized to me because I am apart of that sector and it allowed for a new understanding of my addiction to fast food. It also made me way more conscious of the food decisions I should be making because I am the one that must prioritize my health because fast food companies are not going to do it. Through writing this it was also revealed to me that America is a fast food society and it is a wide spread addiction that is leading the epidemic of obesity. These marketing
The review I originally wrote was all over the place and my ideas were not developed. I talked about the terrible service I received at fast food restaurants, health risk, the benefits of home cooked meals, and advertisements in store, while mildly breezing over the marketing tactics of these companies that keep consumers coming back. I received a bad grade obviously because my ideas were all over and not focused on one specific fast food restaurant through a review of it and incorporating my own opinion in a developed manner. The writing style of a review limits the argumentative style essay that I originally wrote, so I decided to radically revise it by developing one of the ideas I never expanded prior and did a lot of research on it. I chose to turn this essay into an analytical essay because it allows me to formulate my own opinion while using outside sources. The ideas that interested me the most was how do these fast food chains as a whole keep people coming back, and what is the number one heath risk that they lead to. Doing this incorporated ideas from my original paper into the new one, through expansion on a specific aspect of the fast food industry, and one cause and effect module. This new piece allowed for me to expand my ideas and focus on the specific sectors of individuals who are directly targeted through fast food companies marketing style. This made the topic more personalized to me because I am apart of that sector and it allowed for a new understanding of my addiction to fast food. It also made me way more conscious of the food decisions I should be making because I am the one that must prioritize my health because fast food companies are not going to do it. Through writing this it was also revealed to me that America is a fast food society and it is a wide spread addiction that is leading the epidemic of obesity. These marketing