Reflective writing as a genre allows for a combination of personal reflection and critical thinking all intertwined into one. I turned my reflection essay into a new reflection that focused on a different level of the education system that would allow for me to reflect on my first semester of college to back up my allegations against the school system. When attempting to revise my essay in a new way I reread my old one and found an interesting theme screaming out of the paper. It was saying, “high school and Regents did not prepare me for college.” I took the idea a little further and expanded it to the SAT, that is a similar testing style to Regents, that similarly did not prepare me for college, and through research I found that income status
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The review I originally wrote was all over the place and my ideas were not developed. I talked about the terrible service I received at fast food restaurants, health risk, the benefits of home cooked meals, and advertisements in store, while mildly breezing over the marketing tactics of these companies that keep consumers coming back. I received a bad grade obviously because my ideas were all over and not focused on one specific fast food restaurant through a review of it and incorporating my own opinion in a developed manner. The writing style of a review limits the argumentative style essay that I originally wrote, so I decided to radically revise it by developing one of the ideas I never expanded prior and did a lot of research on it. I chose to turn this essay into an analytical essay because it allows me to formulate my own opinion while using outside sources. The ideas that interested me the most was how do these fast food chains as a whole keep people coming back, and what is the number one heath risk that they lead to. Doing this incorporated ideas from my original paper into the new one, through expansion on a specific aspect of the fast food industry, and one cause and effect module. This new piece allowed for me to expand my ideas and focus on the specific sectors of individuals who are directly targeted through fast food companies marketing style. This made the topic more personalized to me because
The review I originally wrote was all over the place and my ideas were not developed. I talked about the terrible service I received at fast food restaurants, health risk, the benefits of home cooked meals, and advertisements in store, while mildly breezing over the marketing tactics of these companies that keep consumers coming back. I received a bad grade obviously because my ideas were all over and not focused on one specific fast food restaurant through a review of it and incorporating my own opinion in a developed manner. The writing style of a review limits the argumentative style essay that I originally wrote, so I decided to radically revise it by developing one of the ideas I never expanded prior and did a lot of research on it. I chose to turn this essay into an analytical essay because it allows me to formulate my own opinion while using outside sources. The ideas that interested me the most was how do these fast food chains as a whole keep people coming back, and what is the number one heath risk that they lead to. Doing this incorporated ideas from my original paper into the new one, through expansion on a specific aspect of the fast food industry, and one cause and effect module. This new piece allowed for me to expand my ideas and focus on the specific sectors of individuals who are directly targeted through fast food companies marketing style. This made the topic more personalized to me because