Kamar Email Case Analysis

What are the respective strengths and weaknesses of the two emails? Be sure to consider tone, structure, and amount of information provided.

Both emails that Kamar drafted have their distinct strengths and weaknesses, which are mainly portrayed through the tone, structure, and amount of information provided throughout the emails. In the first email, Kamar is very descriptive and provides an adequate amount of good information to convince an audience that cloud computing is better than the company’s other option, which is replacing the old physical servers with brand new ones. Kamar also keeps this email short and to the point, which is preferable in a professional environment. Although these are good attributes for an email to acquire, our group found that the weaknesses in this email overshadow …show more content…
Kamar won this coveted co-op position and has a right to be there. This advertising firm hired him because they value his opinions and feel that he will be beneficial to their company. Not only does Kamar have a great solution to the company’s data storage problem, he also has evidence to back it up. Kamar knows that cloud computing is the best option because it is both cost and space effective. If Kamar keeps all of this in mind, he will have the confidence to intervene and voice his opinions in the meeting. Another strategy that Kamar can utilize is asking questions. Through asking questions, Kamar can learn more about the other options for the problem at hand. This could either confirm why his solution is the best and give him a reason to mention it, or show him that there are better options. Asking questions may also give Kamar an opportunity to bring up his solution to the problem. For example, if a co-worker is talking about their solution, Kamar can ask them about the cost. If everyone finds that the cost would be too much, Kamar can bring up his solution of cloud computing and how it is