RACING LINES presents as a sports drama that focuses on the sport of motorcross racing. Motorcross racing provides for a strong hook. The tone is consistently dramatic. The goal is clear and the stakes are very personal. There are solid themes about second chances. The script provides an interesting and credible inside look at the world of motorcross.
The racing sequences are well crafted. The races create strong tension for the audience.
While there’s a lot to like about the script, the script would benefit from more development.
The first act sets up the world of motorcross and the ordinary lives of the main characters of Andy and Theo. There’s a pivotal plot beat when Andy is hurt. The story is propelled into the second act when they …show more content…
The other characters don’t have distinctive voices. Avoid repeating dialogue. Dante twice mentions that racing is in their blood (pages 3 and 10). Both Gerry and Aldo make similar statements about picking up the pieces (pages 68 and 71).
In addition, the repetitive nature of the script, make the pace feel sluggish. One keeps waiting to focus more on the race. With that said, the scenes of the brother getting a sponsorship from the condom company is nicely done and is very intriguing. It adds a bit of needed humor too.
Because of the current structure, the overall tension feels rather mild. When the characters race, it’s very exciting and this generates tension, but overall there’s not enough compelling tension or conflict to sustain the entire plot.
It’s only in the third act that the brothers are forced to compete against each other, and while this generates nice tension, because there’s no emotional connection with either Andy or Theo, the audience isn’t invested in the outcome as strongly as they should be.
The ending at the family home with Andy sobbing, unfortunately, doesn’t elicit any emotional response for the audience. The ending visuals with both of the brothers on top of the rock makes for a nice image, but again, more development between the brothers is
The racing sequences are well crafted. The races create strong tension for the audience.
While there’s a lot to like about the script, the script would benefit from more development.
The first act sets up the world of motorcross and the ordinary lives of the main characters of Andy and Theo. There’s a pivotal plot beat when Andy is hurt. The story is propelled into the second act when they …show more content…
The other characters don’t have distinctive voices. Avoid repeating dialogue. Dante twice mentions that racing is in their blood (pages 3 and 10). Both Gerry and Aldo make similar statements about picking up the pieces (pages 68 and 71).
In addition, the repetitive nature of the script, make the pace feel sluggish. One keeps waiting to focus more on the race. With that said, the scenes of the brother getting a sponsorship from the condom company is nicely done and is very intriguing. It adds a bit of needed humor too.
Because of the current structure, the overall tension feels rather mild. When the characters race, it’s very exciting and this generates tension, but overall there’s not enough compelling tension or conflict to sustain the entire plot.
It’s only in the third act that the brothers are forced to compete against each other, and while this generates nice tension, because there’s no emotional connection with either Andy or Theo, the audience isn’t invested in the outcome as strongly as they should be.
The ending at the family home with Andy sobbing, unfortunately, doesn’t elicit any emotional response for the audience. The ending visuals with both of the brothers on top of the rock makes for a nice image, but again, more development between the brothers is