CANARY is an intriguing one hour proposed pilot that offers a complex and compelling female protagonist. The concept for this dramatic, crime show is also intriguing. The idea of a troubled woman coerced into spying on her friends and family to help the FBI track a domestic terrorist has appeal.
However, it should be noted that some audiences may not be able to take the leap that the FBI would consider using an obviously dysfunctional woman to help track a very deadly bomber. It’s a bit of a leap, unless there’s information that hasn’t been revealed yet.
The tone is dark. The goal is clear and the stakes are very high. One can envision a long-term series. There’s a compelling mystery, several possible suspects, and likable protagonist to drive …show more content…
She’s rich with potential and appears to be a character that could attract talent. Make sure the series peels away her backstory about the car accident (perhaps there’s a twist) and her relationships with the other characters. Her love for her son feels very authentic. This shows the softer side of her. She has a tough exterior, yet she’s very vulnerable. She’s clearly flawed, but the audience easily roots for her. Be careful of making her too weak (taking too many drugs), as this will make it more challenging to care about her.
All of the other supporting characters feel highly distinctive including Calvin, Fawn, and Annie. Agent Birdy is the least understood. He’s awkward (due to his past being made fun of), but he doesn’t, yet, fully captivate the audience. There appears to be some secret about his past, “This is your last chance.” It will be nice to understand what this means and who the dark suit person is. While he goes to the party to, perhaps, “fit” in, it still is a sequence that just doesn’t quite engage. Perhaps something stronger has to happen at the party.
The dialogue is consistent to each character. The dialogue also reveals the theme about second
However, it should be noted that some audiences may not be able to take the leap that the FBI would consider using an obviously dysfunctional woman to help track a very deadly bomber. It’s a bit of a leap, unless there’s information that hasn’t been revealed yet.
The tone is dark. The goal is clear and the stakes are very high. One can envision a long-term series. There’s a compelling mystery, several possible suspects, and likable protagonist to drive …show more content…
She’s rich with potential and appears to be a character that could attract talent. Make sure the series peels away her backstory about the car accident (perhaps there’s a twist) and her relationships with the other characters. Her love for her son feels very authentic. This shows the softer side of her. She has a tough exterior, yet she’s very vulnerable. She’s clearly flawed, but the audience easily roots for her. Be careful of making her too weak (taking too many drugs), as this will make it more challenging to care about her.
All of the other supporting characters feel highly distinctive including Calvin, Fawn, and Annie. Agent Birdy is the least understood. He’s awkward (due to his past being made fun of), but he doesn’t, yet, fully captivate the audience. There appears to be some secret about his past, “This is your last chance.” It will be nice to understand what this means and who the dark suit person is. While he goes to the party to, perhaps, “fit” in, it still is a sequence that just doesn’t quite engage. Perhaps something stronger has to happen at the party.
The dialogue is consistent to each character. The dialogue also reveals the theme about second