RUNAWAY SWEETHEARTS is a sweet, family friendly, coming of age story. The script is driven by solid themes about abandonment, healing, learning to move on, and letting go. The tone is dramatic blended with some humor. The characters offered are likable characters. The main characters of Chris and Will are clearly dealing with inner conflict, as they mourn the loss of Will’s mother. The story sends a special message about moving on after loss.
While the idea of childhood sweethearts is sweet, the script would benefit from further development.
The first act does a nice job establishing the ordinary world of Chris and Will. It’s clear they mourn the death of Chris’ wife and Will’s mother. The first act is propelled forward when they move and start a new life.
The first concern about the presentation, however, is the structure and pace. The main hook of the story of “runaway sweethearts” comes too late in the structure. Young Will and Lizzy don’t come up with a plan to runaway until about page 79. This is far to late to introduce the hook of “runaway sweethearts.” …show more content…
As currently structured, there’s no external goal for Chris or Will. When there’s no solid goal or objective, this causes the structure to wander and feel fragmented. Currently, the storylines jumps around from being about Will learning to face a bully, to Will learning to accept the idea that his father is moving on with another woman, to the death of the grandfather, to Lizzy’s family moving away, and to his decision to runaway. Then the structure jumps again to 20 years later, and focuses on what appears to be an adult romance, love story. Thus, the structure needs to be streamlined and more
While the idea of childhood sweethearts is sweet, the script would benefit from further development.
The first act does a nice job establishing the ordinary world of Chris and Will. It’s clear they mourn the death of Chris’ wife and Will’s mother. The first act is propelled forward when they move and start a new life.
The first concern about the presentation, however, is the structure and pace. The main hook of the story of “runaway sweethearts” comes too late in the structure. Young Will and Lizzy don’t come up with a plan to runaway until about page 79. This is far to late to introduce the hook of “runaway sweethearts.” …show more content…
As currently structured, there’s no external goal for Chris or Will. When there’s no solid goal or objective, this causes the structure to wander and feel fragmented. Currently, the storylines jumps around from being about Will learning to face a bully, to Will learning to accept the idea that his father is moving on with another woman, to the death of the grandfather, to Lizzy’s family moving away, and to his decision to runaway. Then the structure jumps again to 20 years later, and focuses on what appears to be an adult romance, love story. Thus, the structure needs to be streamlined and more