TRUTH99 is inspired by actual events. The script presents as a classic political, spy thriller that offers various twists and turns along the way. The tone is dramatic and gritty. The goal eventually becomes clear and the stakes are life and death. The plot explores themes about truth and justice.
There’s a lot to like about the script, but the script would also benefit from further development. The main concern is following the series of events. It’s the type of story that one easily can get lost in, making it more challenging to follow.
The first act sets up the ordinary world of the protagonist. Mark. It’s clear that he has anger issues, manifested in his fight scenes. He’s also a skilled fighter and he’s alienated from his ex-wife and trying to reconnect to his young daughter. There’s a solid inciting event with the assassination attempt on …show more content…
This is a logical progression that is easier to follow. Consider eliminating the “character” of Litvinenko, as he confuses the plot (or clarify his role).
Consider moving up the teaming of Alexandra and Mark. Create more chemistry. Consider not killing Alexandra. The audience likes her and the audience disconnects from the story when she dies.
Dmitri also dies too soon. He should be present in the climax hero vs. foe battle. For the audience, he’s the main antagonist and killing him on page 77 is much too soon.
Consider finding a way to bring all the characters together in the climax, including Marina.
The ending most likely will not satisfy the audience when Mark is trapped and gassed. The audience wants to see their hero succeed. While certainly there have been films in which the hero dies, it normally occurs when the hero is protecting others and they make a moral sacrifice. The ending right now is just too depressing and it doesn’t provide the audience with a gratifying emotional
There’s a lot to like about the script, but the script would also benefit from further development. The main concern is following the series of events. It’s the type of story that one easily can get lost in, making it more challenging to follow.
The first act sets up the ordinary world of the protagonist. Mark. It’s clear that he has anger issues, manifested in his fight scenes. He’s also a skilled fighter and he’s alienated from his ex-wife and trying to reconnect to his young daughter. There’s a solid inciting event with the assassination attempt on …show more content…
This is a logical progression that is easier to follow. Consider eliminating the “character” of Litvinenko, as he confuses the plot (or clarify his role).
Consider moving up the teaming of Alexandra and Mark. Create more chemistry. Consider not killing Alexandra. The audience likes her and the audience disconnects from the story when she dies.
Dmitri also dies too soon. He should be present in the climax hero vs. foe battle. For the audience, he’s the main antagonist and killing him on page 77 is much too soon.
Consider finding a way to bring all the characters together in the climax, including Marina.
The ending most likely will not satisfy the audience when Mark is trapped and gassed. The audience wants to see their hero succeed. While certainly there have been films in which the hero dies, it normally occurs when the hero is protecting others and they make a moral sacrifice. The ending right now is just too depressing and it doesn’t provide the audience with a gratifying emotional