1. The first issue with this analysis is the lack of supportive evidence. Since an analysis evaluates one source in depth, the author should have had more detailed recounts of the evidence he is trying to use to support his thesis. Much of the evidence that was used refers to nonspecific points in the plot, such as: “Michael’s delegation of the task of finding healthcare starts the unproductive process as he was primarily responsible for that task” (Smith, para. 4). The next issue is the lack of citations. Much of this analysis is spent summarizing the plot but there is no attempt made to properly cite from where this evidence came from.
2. In several instances, the author of this essay uses the first person to relate the business discipline to his personal life or state his own opinion. For instance, “He reminds me of my boss at work. I’m sure he doesn’t do much work either as …show more content…
2). The essay also lacks any direct citations to the episode used, there are no quotes and any paraphrasing he may have used is not cited.
3. The MLA formatting guide includes a header that contains your last name followed with a page number starting at 1 on the first page. Also, the way in which the t.v. show is referred to in the paper is incorrect. The episode name should be in parenthesis and the series name should be in italics, so it should be as follows: “Health Care,” The Office. The student, however, correctly started the paper with the student’s name, the professor’s name, the class, and the date all double spaced and on the first page above the start of the paper.
4. Original: “First of all, the boss in “The Office” is very lazy. He spends most of the episode talking about what he’s going to do rather than actually doing it. He also delegates some of his responsibility to other people. He reminds me of my boss at work. I’m sure he doesn’t do much work either as he sits back in his chair and does
2. In several instances, the author of this essay uses the first person to relate the business discipline to his personal life or state his own opinion. For instance, “He reminds me of my boss at work. I’m sure he doesn’t do much work either as …show more content…
2). The essay also lacks any direct citations to the episode used, there are no quotes and any paraphrasing he may have used is not cited.
3. The MLA formatting guide includes a header that contains your last name followed with a page number starting at 1 on the first page. Also, the way in which the t.v. show is referred to in the paper is incorrect. The episode name should be in parenthesis and the series name should be in italics, so it should be as follows: “Health Care,” The Office. The student, however, correctly started the paper with the student’s name, the professor’s name, the class, and the date all double spaced and on the first page above the start of the paper.
4. Original: “First of all, the boss in “The Office” is very lazy. He spends most of the episode talking about what he’s going to do rather than actually doing it. He also delegates some of his responsibility to other people. He reminds me of my boss at work. I’m sure he doesn’t do much work either as he sits back in his chair and does