In this writing assignment I have gained insight about my weaknesses in writing. My weaknesses encompass the following: writing a conclusion, essay structure, and vocabulary.
My teacher and my peers have pointed out that my conclusion is weak. I have earned comments that suggest to “offer some new revelation in [the] conclusion”. My past teachers have only taught me to restate the ideas of the thesis and provide some major details that support my thesis. To improve my essay, I could have included, in the conclusion, how Greek and Roman culture can explain why Medea was portrayed differently and why the tones were different. I have also learned not to use inane and formulaic transitions, such as “In conclusion”, in my conclusion. I can improve …show more content…
My teacher pointed out my lack of variance in my sentence structure. When I reviewed my essay, I noticed that most of my sentences were simple sentences, some complex sentences, and few compound sentences. My essay was dominated with simple sentences; this should not be the case, and my writing should incorporate more complex and compound sentences. In addition to lack of variance in sentence structures, I also lack in using colorful language. For example, my essay uses many boring verbs, and lacks the presence of strong verbs. Instead of using boring verbs, such as have, are, is, seem, and was, I could have used stronger verbs. To illustrate, instead of saying, “The prologues have different tones, and have differing portrayals of Medea.” I could have said, “The prologues differ in their tone and in how they portray Medea.” The next weakness in my essay is my lead-ins to quotes. Some of my lead-ins are “somebody says” lead-ins. For example, my first lead in writes, “For example, Medea says….” I could improve my essay by beginning the sentence with my words and ending it with a quote. To illustrate, I could have said, “Medea invokes the goddess Lucina and asks for her to, ‘bring death to the new bride and the royal
My teacher and my peers have pointed out that my conclusion is weak. I have earned comments that suggest to “offer some new revelation in [the] conclusion”. My past teachers have only taught me to restate the ideas of the thesis and provide some major details that support my thesis. To improve my essay, I could have included, in the conclusion, how Greek and Roman culture can explain why Medea was portrayed differently and why the tones were different. I have also learned not to use inane and formulaic transitions, such as “In conclusion”, in my conclusion. I can improve …show more content…
My teacher pointed out my lack of variance in my sentence structure. When I reviewed my essay, I noticed that most of my sentences were simple sentences, some complex sentences, and few compound sentences. My essay was dominated with simple sentences; this should not be the case, and my writing should incorporate more complex and compound sentences. In addition to lack of variance in sentence structures, I also lack in using colorful language. For example, my essay uses many boring verbs, and lacks the presence of strong verbs. Instead of using boring verbs, such as have, are, is, seem, and was, I could have used stronger verbs. To illustrate, instead of saying, “The prologues have different tones, and have differing portrayals of Medea.” I could have said, “The prologues differ in their tone and in how they portray Medea.” The next weakness in my essay is my lead-ins to quotes. Some of my lead-ins are “somebody says” lead-ins. For example, my first lead in writes, “For example, Medea says….” I could improve my essay by beginning the sentence with my words and ending it with a quote. To illustrate, I could have said, “Medea invokes the goddess Lucina and asks for her to, ‘bring death to the new bride and the royal