Television Engagement Has Negative Effects On Australian Adolescent Weight
The introduction of the study explores the idea that television engagement has negative effects on Australian adolescent weight, flaws contained within the introduction are
• First sentence was supported by nonexistent source, questioning study reliability and credibility
• Comparison of Australian and American BMI, without taking into account cultural differences
• Hypothesis do not predict the outcome of the study and multiple unnecessary secondary hypothesis (can be compacted)
• Hypothesis written as questions.
• Aim is poorly written
The information in the introduction provides justification for research to be conducted however, the very first sentence expresses “obesity identified as…. most important public health issue”, although it supports this idea by referencing “most reliable survey data” however no actual survey is listed negatively affecting the credibility and reliability of the research as potentially obesity being the biggest risk to adolescence could be a biased opinion of the researcher. The aim of the study is to identify the relationship between television viewing and its correlation between overweigh adolescence, although the aim is poorly written and could use a polish to give it a nicer flow for simplicity and clarification purposes for potential readers. The hypothesis is “will high levels of television viewing directly cause an increase in weight?” this is incorrect as a hypothesis is meant to predict an outcome for the studied area,…