Underlined political fight: I meant women helped gain some additional reforms in politics but listing it as fight gives wrong sense to the reader.
No to political party: I misinterpreted the National Women’s Party as political party. It was party formed for women that helped them raise their voice in society.
No evidence, no sources + thesis mid 19th century economic change not on question: I need to make sure that I stay on topic because I discussed little bit of economic which wasn't the question. Therefore a better Thesis will be Women’s reform during Progressive Era helped America in positive way.
The: I forgot to add article and therefore it hurts the sentence.
Underline housewives: I wanted to say that before Progressive Era women were just housewives and instead of …show more content…
Salesclerk, teacher, nurse. I just mentioned industries which makes them look limited at workplace.
Underline Pays: By pays I meant that they realize the money that they were earning was lot less than the men doing the same work. Pays sound awkward in the context.
Underline this marked the beginning of women’s role in politics?: The sentence is jumbled. I wanted to say that after realizing inequality in the workplace women wanted to make things equal and therefore they needed to get involved in politics.
Who else?: The other people that helped investigate corruption was private investigators.
Underline social suffrage? I started talking about social conditions while the paragraph was suppose to be focused on political suffrage. Therefore, going off topic.
Political means?: I meant that women were fighting for voting rights by forcing Congress to ratify 19th Amendment.
Underline excluded women: I wanted to say that it enfranchised black men but not black or white women.
Famous for asking Eugene Debs for women suffrage?: I was mentioning the meeting of Susan Anthony with Eugene debs where she asked for women's suffrage although it's not famous yet I mentioned that it was
No to political party: I misinterpreted the National Women’s Party as political party. It was party formed for women that helped them raise their voice in society.
No evidence, no sources + thesis mid 19th century economic change not on question: I need to make sure that I stay on topic because I discussed little bit of economic which wasn't the question. Therefore a better Thesis will be Women’s reform during Progressive Era helped America in positive way.
The: I forgot to add article and therefore it hurts the sentence.
Underline housewives: I wanted to say that before Progressive Era women were just housewives and instead of …show more content…
Salesclerk, teacher, nurse. I just mentioned industries which makes them look limited at workplace.
Underline Pays: By pays I meant that they realize the money that they were earning was lot less than the men doing the same work. Pays sound awkward in the context.
Underline this marked the beginning of women’s role in politics?: The sentence is jumbled. I wanted to say that after realizing inequality in the workplace women wanted to make things equal and therefore they needed to get involved in politics.
Who else?: The other people that helped investigate corruption was private investigators.
Underline social suffrage? I started talking about social conditions while the paragraph was suppose to be focused on political suffrage. Therefore, going off topic.
Political means?: I meant that women were fighting for voting rights by forcing Congress to ratify 19th Amendment.
Underline excluded women: I wanted to say that it enfranchised black men but not black or white women.
Famous for asking Eugene Debs for women suffrage?: I was mentioning the meeting of Susan Anthony with Eugene debs where she asked for women's suffrage although it's not famous yet I mentioned that it was