Paragraph one intro:
Hook:
Background: Both the roman and Athenian empires were powerful. They were also stricter in some areas more than others such as their systems of citizenships and the rights and the responsibility that came along with it.
Thesis: The Romans had a better system of citizenship than Athens, because of the ability to move up in social class, they allowed more people to become citizens, and they had a better system of government.
Paragraph 2 body:
Topic sentence: The Romans had a better system of citizenship because they allowed people to move up in social class.
Evidence: “The censors not only counted the Rome’s citizens, but… ranked them into distinct classes…”
Explanation: This means that unlike most empires their social …show more content…
Paragraph 3 body:
Topic sentence: The Romans also had a better system of citizenship because they allowed more people to join their empire.
Evidence: “sons of freed slave: yes, female children: yes, Free-native born male children: yes”
Explanation: Unlike Athens, Rome allowed most females and sons of freed slaves to gain citizenship.
Evidence: “Rome: At birth if parents were citizens and if married in certain areas of Europe”
Explanation: This means that Rome allowed any native born person to gain citizenship so long as their parents were citizens.
Paragraph 4 body:
Topic sentence: The Romans had a better system of citizenship because of their government.
Evidence: “The Roman senate…usually came from the oldest Roman families and inherited their seats.”
Explanation: The Romans had a fixed system where the people with the most amount of knowledge of the land made the decisions unlike Athens who let any inexperienced person step into office.
Evidence: “The Senate had primary responsibilities for foreign relations, including selecting ambassadors, making treaties, and creating
Hook:
Background: Both the roman and Athenian empires were powerful. They were also stricter in some areas more than others such as their systems of citizenships and the rights and the responsibility that came along with it.
Thesis: The Romans had a better system of citizenship than Athens, because of the ability to move up in social class, they allowed more people to become citizens, and they had a better system of government.
Paragraph 2 body:
Topic sentence: The Romans had a better system of citizenship because they allowed people to move up in social class.
Evidence: “The censors not only counted the Rome’s citizens, but… ranked them into distinct classes…”
Explanation: This means that unlike most empires their social …show more content…
Paragraph 3 body:
Topic sentence: The Romans also had a better system of citizenship because they allowed more people to join their empire.
Evidence: “sons of freed slave: yes, female children: yes, Free-native born male children: yes”
Explanation: Unlike Athens, Rome allowed most females and sons of freed slaves to gain citizenship.
Evidence: “Rome: At birth if parents were citizens and if married in certain areas of Europe”
Explanation: This means that Rome allowed any native born person to gain citizenship so long as their parents were citizens.
Paragraph 4 body:
Topic sentence: The Romans had a better system of citizenship because of their government.
Evidence: “The Roman senate…usually came from the oldest Roman families and inherited their seats.”
Explanation: The Romans had a fixed system where the people with the most amount of knowledge of the land made the decisions unlike Athens who let any inexperienced person step into office.
Evidence: “The Senate had primary responsibilities for foreign relations, including selecting ambassadors, making treaties, and creating