Essay about The Fate Of Destiny By Sci Fi Horror Tale

1307 Words Apr 4th, 2016 null Page
THE FATE OF DESTINY is a supernatural, sci-fi horror tale. The main hook about a group of teens finding a mysterious box and then discovering that they have special powers because of the box has merit. The story is driven by themes about fate and destiny. The audience is easily pulled into the mystery of the box.

Unfortunately, while the idea is good, the story doesn’t fully deliver the promise of the premise. The script would benefit from further development.

The main concern about the presentation is the structure. The structure utilizes too many flashbacks, too many dreams, and transitions in time, even to five years later. It’s a very confusing timeline to follow. Thus, it would really benefit the script to restructure the entire presentation. It’s fine to open this type of script in the past and then transition to the present day storyline, but it would really be imperative to eliminate the numerous flashbacks. A few memory flashes is fine. Right now, the story feels like it takes place more in the past than it does in the present storyline. There’s also no need to transition to five years later.

In addition, the constant transitioning back and forth in various time zones actually ends up hindering the pace. The viewer is waiting for the story to move forward, not backwards.

Moveover, the characters are not proactive enough in solving their dilemma. This is because their goal and their dilemma hasn’t actually been defined or clarified. If the goal is to find…

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