The poetic diction used in your poem appears to be well thought out. However, the phrasing of the lines are awkward. Thus giving the poem a staccato rhythm. I understand some of the phrasing is due to the limitations of the assignment, however, you should consider rephrasing certain lines or changing the rhyme scheme. For example lines three and four “I was perhaps misinformed that day, neglecting even the lizards…” The phrasing of the line seems off. Further on in the poem there is a line that appears out of place five beginning with the word “and” and continuing to the end of line six. In line 13 I would challenge the use of the words “Because though” since it does not sum up the last line of the poem well. Perhaps exchange the word “because”
