The Dry Man Analysis

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I really enjoyed reading both of your stories. They were based off of truly interesting ideas, and I think you had some really great moments. Still, there are some things you may want to think about during the editing process. Throughout both stories, I was incredibly impressed by your use of description. I think your writing perfectly embodied the idea of ‘showing and not telling’. In “the dry man”, you used original imagery that I did not expect, but that created vivid images as I read. In “One Angry Man”, you did a great job of capturing the tense emotional state of the character of Professor Lawrence throughout the story without simple statements that outright revealed his emotional or mental state (i.e. “He was depressed”). In this way, between both pieces, I found myself able to really create a visual image in my mind about what was going on, while gaining insight into the inner thoughts and feelings of the characters. Nicely done! I was a bit confused about the titles of your poems. Since they were fairly similar in nature, I wondered if the stories were meant to be paired together. However I was not sure. In turn, I was not sure whether to be guiding my reading experience by linking them together or not. Additionally, I would have liked a bit more elaboration in “the dry man”. You created this immensely …show more content…
I think the pacing of your story once Professor Lawrence enters the classroom is fantastic. You build the tension in a truly encapsulating way. However, I found the earlier half of the story to fall a bit flat in comparison. That may be the nature of the story, as a scene with a gun involved will inherently be more exciting than one without. However, you may want to think about how the beginning of your story functions on its own, in order to realize where its power lies and what you can alter to make it more

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