My first drafts were well first drafts. Mounds of errors surrounded my papers. Misused words such as the word solidarity in the draft “The coffee perspective” and the word Nebulas in the poem “The Arctic Fox” flooded my paper. Although these errors were merely surface level, other elements were missing from my drafts. For instance, imagery and visual language were lacking in my poems, especially my first poem. Clear syntax, style, and organization were evidently lacking in my second poem. To combat this, I utilized my readings, such as James Tate, Marvin Bell as well as Addonizio to create poetry that stood out from the page and ultimately create “good poetry.”
For example, in the draft “The Coffee Perspective,” I attempted to install improvements …show more content…
However, changes were necessary nonetheless. In Marvin Bell’s technique of Re-reading, He states, “Syntax is logic or the appearance of it, and a new logic inevitably produces a new tone of voice (Bell Page 84)”. When making changes to the second poem, I paid close attention to the syntax. Sometimes I found individual stanzas would fare better if repositioned in the poem. For example, in "Arctic Fox," I rearranged, stanzas 1,2 with 3,4 respectively. Due to the change of stanzas, the syntax in the beginning and middle ultimately changed, therefore, creating a new language and strengthening the beginning and intermediate of the poem. In addition to the modification of these stanzas, I found the syntax “Arctic fox’s” end “killing me” to be rather weak. As a result, I decided to make the poem’s ending stronger and a bit more mysterious, replacing the line "killing me" with “begging me to stay, pleading for a home.” This ending adds a mysterious element to the poem and makes the reader question the state of the fox, rather than saying the Fox is dying. In Marvin Bell’s Technique of Re-reading, he says, “Sometimes, at the end of a poem, the world is larger, and the speaker is less alone.” (Bell Page 88) While the speaker is certainly still alone, this new ending creates a larger world full of mystery for the
For example, in the draft “The Coffee Perspective,” I attempted to install improvements …show more content…
However, changes were necessary nonetheless. In Marvin Bell’s technique of Re-reading, He states, “Syntax is logic or the appearance of it, and a new logic inevitably produces a new tone of voice (Bell Page 84)”. When making changes to the second poem, I paid close attention to the syntax. Sometimes I found individual stanzas would fare better if repositioned in the poem. For example, in "Arctic Fox," I rearranged, stanzas 1,2 with 3,4 respectively. Due to the change of stanzas, the syntax in the beginning and middle ultimately changed, therefore, creating a new language and strengthening the beginning and intermediate of the poem. In addition to the modification of these stanzas, I found the syntax “Arctic fox’s” end “killing me” to be rather weak. As a result, I decided to make the poem’s ending stronger and a bit more mysterious, replacing the line "killing me" with “begging me to stay, pleading for a home.” This ending adds a mysterious element to the poem and makes the reader question the state of the fox, rather than saying the Fox is dying. In Marvin Bell’s Technique of Re-reading, he says, “Sometimes, at the end of a poem, the world is larger, and the speaker is less alone.” (Bell Page 88) While the speaker is certainly still alone, this new ending creates a larger world full of mystery for the