Summary Of Rhetorical Choices Made By Jaschik

In the first article a few main errors really strike me after the first, then second read of the paper. The thesis of a paper should present the topic of your paper and also make a comment about your position in relation to the topic. This being so, the writer does not go into detail about the specific rhetorical choices made by Jaschik. The lack of a clarifying thesis makes the paper seen jumbled, almost as if crucial information is randomly spliced throughout the piece. The second issue I noticed is that within the body paragraphs themselves, the same information seemed to be repeated over and over again, each time using a new arrangement of words. The unnecessary claims and text jumble the body paragraph and take away from the impact of the claim made. …show more content…
In the first draft we saw that in the thesis, the author leaves out the different rhetoric devices used by Jaschik to help further employ his point related towards how plagiarism is bad. This issue is addressed at the end of the first paragraph where our writer goes on the list how “Jaschik uses illustrations, formal diction, and expert testimonies to effectively argue…” By listing the rhetorical devices used by Jaschik, our writer is able to provide a rigid thesis that the paper can be structured around.
The second issue I was able to catch in the first draft was also addressed in the revised version as well. This issue was the repeating of the same information in a different format over and over, until the paragraph is complete. This jumbled up the paper and made it difficult for me to read. In order to address this, the writer was able to structure the way his paragraphs were so that when read, information is built upon each other. This makes it easier to follow what the writer is trying to express because then information is given chronologically vs all over the