Draft

The changes I made between the first draft and the final draft were give more details and elaborate on the example of discourse of the young woman describing an individual to her parents differently and then describing the individual to her boyfriend. Also giving more explanation on what Discourse is and how it affects people and the environment they are in. As for deleting or taking out stuff I did not need, it was very easy because after rereading it I was able to caught my mistakes and…

The Orioles are well known for their complete and utter disinterest in using their international signing bonus pool to sign prospects from Central and South America. Baseball America claims that the Orioles spent the least of all teams in 2013 (http://www.baseballamerica.com/international/2013-international-spending-by-team/) and second lowest in 2014 (http://www.baseballamerica.com/international/2014-international-spending-team/). Orioles’ fans are concerned by this because about one-sixth of…

began in March of 1966, David Paul O’Brien and several acquaintances were accused of burning their draft cards outside of The South Boston Courthouse. A draft card was a card a male received when he turned 18 containing all his information written on it, and it was put into a lottery so they had the possibility of entering the United States Military. O’Brien confessed that he was burning his draft card, therefore he was put on trial and sentenced at the United States District Court for the…

Draft 2 After re-reading my first draft several times in preparation for this, a realization struck me questioning what the heck I actually meant by my personal philosophy. Despite my bold statement of setting out on the path to break free from this preset pattern of life for us; for an individual to achieve the unattainable heights of success or notoriety, I cannot help but feel a slight cringe. The reason for this contributed to me truly realizing just how little I knew about human life, and…

the soldiers going to graveyards, which establishes the casualty and mourning that happens during and after war. Many men who were drafted publicly burned their draft cards, which highlights the resistance people felt in going to war. Protests happened for years, which exemplifies the persistence of the American people to stop the draft. A line in Where Have All the Flowers Gone that exemplifies the soldiers dying is in Stanza four. Seeger says, “Where have all the soldiers gone? Gone to…

In the beginning of the 1960s, it seemed to be the dawn of a golden age, but by the end of the 60’s many Americans thought the nation was falling apart. The JFK assassination, Vietnam war, fights for civil rights, racial tensions, radical students, and the MLK assassination were main events that took place in the 60’s that made many Americans fear the worst for our nation. In the middle of all the hate, crime, and death were 16 major league baseball teams fighting for a championship, not caring…

paper, I actually had to take away quotes because an excess of them was diluting the analysis. Taking away quotes, in turn also means that I had to create a more specific conversation between the quotes I already had. Take for example, in my revised draft I write as a set up for text evidence that: In France, as mentioned in the book there is memorial to the victims of the roundup but it does not mention who took the Jews to the camp. As Julia recounts ‘On the black marble, there was no…

suspended for it in 2016. Tom Brady is a very well known football player because of going from such a low draft pick to an NFL(National Football League) great by breaking and setting records. Finally, Tom Brady has become one of the greatest quarterbacks of all time, has had a significant impact on today's history because he overcame suspension and injury, and he went from being a 6th round draft pick and little known college player to a starting superstar. Before Tom Brady's life in the…

Sadly, this is not the case at all. Lamott gives the reader “the idea of shitty first drafts. All good writers write them.” (21) This sections helped me understand that my shitty first draft is not the death of me. First drafts are meant to be shitty because they help us put all our ideas down on paper and then make the fantastic second draft we can because we already make mistakes and got all our bad ideas out, and now all we must do is reorganize, touch it up…

Writing 39 A is an important class, which designed to help students better analyze and understand various academic texts, the skill, which would be later essential in their future careers. I believe that this course has helped me a lot. I think my language style has improved and I started to write my texts better and clearly. One of the most important things that I have learnt in Writing 39 A class is the importance of the word choice. This class made me notice in how many different ways the…