I thoroughly enjoyed reading the vast variety of topics my classmates picked for their project two. There were all types of topics I was blessed to read such as Gun control, Police brutality, and wage gap. Reading the different kind of topics gave me an insight of topics I wouldn’t really have researched myself. Although I enjoyed reading the project 2 rough drafts. We as a class room still have a lot of work to do before the final portfolio. Some more than others, but in general we all need to work on our projects twos to make them that much better.
In respect with all the rough drafts I read I saw that most of them had a hard time determining their target audience. For example, the piece Benefits of Running the opening paragraph it seems …show more content…
Once again just like in Benefits of Running in their opening sentence they already confuse the reader of which target audience they want to go with. They state two different audience, which are high schoolers and middle schoolers. This is an easy fix for the writer by just eliminating either one of the audience they listed. I pretty sure the writer was targeting high schoolers, because they name the high school they attended. For the writer on this piece I would strive away from going into the middle school audience even though it might correlate to your topic. It will make your paper difficult to pin point your target …show more content…
For example, in The Controlling of Guns the writer would say “sources” but then not follow up with any kind of source to prove the statistic they provided. This is confusing to the reader, because you don’t know if they information is factual or if the writer just made it up to provide more information. This is bad because the writer could be providing wrong information to the public thus informing people about something that is not factual.
The Controlling of Guns over all was a good piece in my opinion. Even though it provided some statistics that may or may not be true due to the lack or citation. The writer still provided countless types of other statistics that were followed by citations. I also like how they kept it local to the area the they living in now. They could have easily have made the topic about their home town, but they made it about
In respect with all the rough drafts I read I saw that most of them had a hard time determining their target audience. For example, the piece Benefits of Running the opening paragraph it seems …show more content…
Once again just like in Benefits of Running in their opening sentence they already confuse the reader of which target audience they want to go with. They state two different audience, which are high schoolers and middle schoolers. This is an easy fix for the writer by just eliminating either one of the audience they listed. I pretty sure the writer was targeting high schoolers, because they name the high school they attended. For the writer on this piece I would strive away from going into the middle school audience even though it might correlate to your topic. It will make your paper difficult to pin point your target …show more content…
For example, in The Controlling of Guns the writer would say “sources” but then not follow up with any kind of source to prove the statistic they provided. This is confusing to the reader, because you don’t know if they information is factual or if the writer just made it up to provide more information. This is bad because the writer could be providing wrong information to the public thus informing people about something that is not factual.
The Controlling of Guns over all was a good piece in my opinion. Even though it provided some statistics that may or may not be true due to the lack or citation. The writer still provided countless types of other statistics that were followed by citations. I also like how they kept it local to the area the they living in now. They could have easily have made the topic about their home town, but they made it about