In Yemen where I grew up, I didn’t take any English classes. When I came to the United State, I began to take an ESOL classes in order to improve in English. Form semester to semester, I have shown improvement in my writing. The essay I wrote in English 49 demonstrated my strengthens and weakness as a writer, where I showed improvement during the semester and what I need to focus on in the future.
My whole process essay was difficult, but also it was one of my favorite essays. My whole process essay provides me with an opportunity to tell a story about myself, and also helped me develop my academic writing skills. One of my strengths in my essay was providing details. For example, I talk about my experiences in high school when I first came …show more content…
I talk about the causes and consequences of hunger. My points were lack of job, food waste, and less food programs. I used the video “Hunger Hits its Home” to demonstrate my points. As a writer, there were clear areas where I saw marked improvement in my writing. One of the areas I saw improvement in was revising for complete paragraphs. In my argumentative essay, I was stating facts and making conclusions without including citations to support them. As I revised the essay, I learned how to incorporate quotes from the readings as well as using personal examples and research to strengthen my claims. For example, as I wrote about the social issue of Hunger in America, I gave the statistic that, “Forty percent of food is thrown out in the United State every year." Then, I supported this statistic by giving evidence that I personally saw some hungry people in America. Additionally, some of my Strengths were focusing on the essay respond, relating the controlling ideas to each point, and including examples. And some of my Weaknesses were that at the end of the introduction, thesis was missing, from missing thesis to “The cause of hunger is due to the lack of jobs, food being wasted and less food programs.” Also body paragraphs needs citations, and I had grammar Errors including run-on, and fragments. But After I receive feedback, and revise the essay I improve in those areas. This essay helped me learn how to provide citations, and more
My whole process essay was difficult, but also it was one of my favorite essays. My whole process essay provides me with an opportunity to tell a story about myself, and also helped me develop my academic writing skills. One of my strengths in my essay was providing details. For example, I talk about my experiences in high school when I first came …show more content…
I talk about the causes and consequences of hunger. My points were lack of job, food waste, and less food programs. I used the video “Hunger Hits its Home” to demonstrate my points. As a writer, there were clear areas where I saw marked improvement in my writing. One of the areas I saw improvement in was revising for complete paragraphs. In my argumentative essay, I was stating facts and making conclusions without including citations to support them. As I revised the essay, I learned how to incorporate quotes from the readings as well as using personal examples and research to strengthen my claims. For example, as I wrote about the social issue of Hunger in America, I gave the statistic that, “Forty percent of food is thrown out in the United State every year." Then, I supported this statistic by giving evidence that I personally saw some hungry people in America. Additionally, some of my Strengths were focusing on the essay respond, relating the controlling ideas to each point, and including examples. And some of my Weaknesses were that at the end of the introduction, thesis was missing, from missing thesis to “The cause of hunger is due to the lack of jobs, food being wasted and less food programs.” Also body paragraphs needs citations, and I had grammar Errors including run-on, and fragments. But After I receive feedback, and revise the essay I improve in those areas. This essay helped me learn how to provide citations, and more