What's Working: Toontown

The story was pretty easy to follow with the divided up sections for each ToonTown character. The only question I had in regards to clarity was where the voices were coming from? I wasn’t sure if the voices were an imagination or consciousness of the figures who were sketched and brought to life. I’m not sure how the author wants his readers to read the story? I would like to know what each character is (i.e. drawing, action figure, digital sketch) and whether or not they are alive or dead. I know they aren’t human beings, but if they are dead I don’t think they would have a voice. I just want to know more about the character when I am reading their particular voice. I think the author could clarify if these voices are the soul and spirit of ToonTown’s original artwork and sketches. On the flip side of that, I am wondering if the narration and voice is from the creator/artist who created each superhero. I think who’s talking could be defined rather the reader assuming.

2. What’s Working: The ambition …show more content…
It was easy to follow and I was able to distinguish the different voices from each character. I also appreciated how each section was labeled and titled and not just given a number. It made each section feel personalized and a tribute for each character, who has been replaced.

3. Suggestions for Improvement: I don’t really have any suggestions for improvement; I like the story the way it is. If I had to name one thing, it would be to clarify what each character is or made of. I think the characters are lacking some crucial descriptions in their characterizations. Some characters were defined as GIFs and others I may have overlooked, but I think if you had some details for each character about what they are, as physical objects, your readers could connect more to that particular voice. Even if it’s just a sketch of an action figure on a piece of paper, I think you should clarify that from the