In rereading my peer reviews a fellow student commented: “Your intro paragraph is awesome. It gets the reader thinking about the subject you are about to dive into. But, you don 't have a clear thesis. If you add a clear thesis on the end of that paragraph it will be great!” There it is yet again, my missing thesis With Nicholas Carr’s essay, Is Google Making Us Stupid? (Carr). I do believe that I was not connecting enough with his work because I had already formed an opinion before finishing reading the entire scribe. I found it difficult to stop with my opinion and be objective. Forming that opinion much too early on, did negatively affect me by not allowing myself a deeper understanding of the material at hand. I had to go back and reread Carr’s entire essay that was written on the topic of technology and what it could be doing to our brains, and try to absorb it more fully. In the first paragraph of my drafth, I asked the question, “But, on the contrary, is it possible Google’s efficiency could also be affecting our cognitive thinking process by making it too easy?” By doing this, I was not making an assertion as I should have been. I learned asking a question is not a great idea in my introductory paragraph, you need to answer the
In rereading my peer reviews a fellow student commented: “Your intro paragraph is awesome. It gets the reader thinking about the subject you are about to dive into. But, you don 't have a clear thesis. If you add a clear thesis on the end of that paragraph it will be great!” There it is yet again, my missing thesis With Nicholas Carr’s essay, Is Google Making Us Stupid? (Carr). I do believe that I was not connecting enough with his work because I had already formed an opinion before finishing reading the entire scribe. I found it difficult to stop with my opinion and be objective. Forming that opinion much too early on, did negatively affect me by not allowing myself a deeper understanding of the material at hand. I had to go back and reread Carr’s entire essay that was written on the topic of technology and what it could be doing to our brains, and try to absorb it more fully. In the first paragraph of my drafth, I asked the question, “But, on the contrary, is it possible Google’s efficiency could also be affecting our cognitive thinking process by making it too easy?” By doing this, I was not making an assertion as I should have been. I learned asking a question is not a great idea in my introductory paragraph, you need to answer the