For example, in every essay I would receive a comment from either the TAs or Dr. Clermont that would say something like “Good hook!”. My favorite opening sentence is from my Discourse theory essay “Burying Bodies is a One Man Job: How ’Grass’ by Carl Sanburg Highlights the Violence Perpetrated by Humans Through Parts of Speech” which asks the audience to consider the amount of wars throughout history and to realize that no other species fights amongst themselves on the scale that humans do. My other strength is creating clear thesis statements. Just like my hooks, every essay has received a positive comment about my thesis. For example, in my Queer theory essay my thesis statement was “In Sonnet 135, William Shakespeare uses coding and transgressive sexuality to encourage the Golden Young Man to accept who he is and to have sex with Shakespeare himself.” On Blackboard, Hannah commented “nice thesis statement” and in the Feedback section it says “Very strong thesis statement. You followed through on your argument well.” In my New Criticism essay, “No Buckingham Palace Here; How ‘London’ by William Blake is a Criticism of the City and the Destruction of Family”, I received comments from the Teacher Assistant, Hannah, about my opening sentence and thesis statement such as. that said “I like this, good hook!” and “Clear thesis”. Even Dr. Clermont said I had a “very good …show more content…
I always proofread my essays, but I guess I need to read them more carefully. Dr. Clermont suggested a few times to run my papers through Paper Rater, and I have to admit that I actually never did that. From now on, I will be using that website for all the ever papers I write, because the small grammar issues are something missing small grammar mistakes is something I domake in all my classes. A specific problem I had throughout all my essays was using the passive voice. In my New Criticism essay, I would writewrote sentences such as “Firstly, connotation is used to create the negative mood of the setting.” Fortunately, I have improved my use of passive voice, which can be seen if we compare that transition sentence to one from my Discourse paper. “First off, through the use of proper nouns, the speaker shows how all wars are the same, because death comes for both sides no matter who wins.” Not only did I avoid using passive voice, but the entire sentence is stronger. Though my transition statements have improved since the beginning of the semester, I still need to work on the smaller details. In my Queer Theory essay “Everyone’s Favorite Authors are Gay; A Queer Theory Analysis of William Shakespeare’s Sonnet 135”, Hannah commented “Remember that a transition sentence includes your last theoretical term as well”. In