3. What can I say, jajajajajajajajajajajaja and more jajajajajajajaja. I guess that was the point of this reading this essay. I really do not recall any essays from middle or high school, but the one I have done in college have not had this type or devices. I do know that I have a horrible spelling problem and eventually end up with sentences on my essay that I do not even understand, like the Aldof Hitler error. (I just can’t see how three people did not notice it). Peterson would probably advice this author to stop with the rumbling, to keep it simple and to find a subject that he care about. Obviously, Jeremy Ryan did this essay at the las minute and rumble through it just to meet the length. He went all over the place, form way back
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He continued on paragraph three by saying that ‘summer vacation is a tradition as old as summer vacation itself”; this is just rumbling. He mentioned ancient past but forget to state what part of ancient pass and how much in the …show more content…
Painting in caves go back to the cavemen and the invention of the paper was way later. It’s cute that before the invention of paper he believes kids had to memories their essays and got a grade until late when the paper was invented. He talks about the children of Egyptian like if there where records of children going to school and standing in front of it to share their summer activities with other. Ryan did not research who had the duty of mummifying corpse or that slaves build the pyramids not little kids. In the fourth paragraph basketball was played by Mayans, he failed to provide the correct name of the game and he conformers that Romans and native American had summer vacation. After the fourth paragraph he things he has given us adequate examples of the importance of summer, but he had fail to provide dates, data, names of person in the pass or even a proper name of a city. Noting to support it really happen. Justin’s dad is not a reliable source, and even forgot to add his name. Paragraph number five is even more hilarious, Ryan believe that in the pass every body’s goals where to have fun during summer vacation. Since the dawn of man there have being water parks (jajajajajaja) this is another reason I believe he did this essay at the last
He continued on paragraph three by saying that ‘summer vacation is a tradition as old as summer vacation itself”; this is just rumbling. He mentioned ancient past but forget to state what part of ancient pass and how much in the …show more content…
Painting in caves go back to the cavemen and the invention of the paper was way later. It’s cute that before the invention of paper he believes kids had to memories their essays and got a grade until late when the paper was invented. He talks about the children of Egyptian like if there where records of children going to school and standing in front of it to share their summer activities with other. Ryan did not research who had the duty of mummifying corpse or that slaves build the pyramids not little kids. In the fourth paragraph basketball was played by Mayans, he failed to provide the correct name of the game and he conformers that Romans and native American had summer vacation. After the fourth paragraph he things he has given us adequate examples of the importance of summer, but he had fail to provide dates, data, names of person in the pass or even a proper name of a city. Noting to support it really happen. Justin’s dad is not a reliable source, and even forgot to add his name. Paragraph number five is even more hilarious, Ryan believe that in the pass every body’s goals where to have fun during summer vacation. Since the dawn of man there have being water parks (jajajajajaja) this is another reason I believe he did this essay at the last