My second short story of the collection dives into a description of beach storm. Titled, “Untouched land”, it opens with the “Wind howling as the sand bombarded my face.” This immediate picture places the reader on the edge, as the future storm looms. This story recounts a storm my family and I experienced which vacationing at the beach. Through the strong, bold start of this piece I took some risk as a writer. I opened with the first paragraph feeling the storms presence and the power surrounding it. Then, I decided to flash back in time to the arrival and write all the events that led to the first paragraph then take away from where it left off. I attempted to use this technique to hook the reader in and use suspense. I hoped that excited
