Despite the fact the first draft is a little wordy, I would pick the first draft as the final version. It offers you a great deal of information and allows you to completely understand and experience the danger of underage drinking. This draft flows almost like a conversation, going from a detailed scenario to the problem, its’ acceptance, effects and the results of drinking. The writer also interviews and follows a student in the same situation and gives first-hand experience allowing the reader to have a total picture. One of the strong points of this essay is its’ introduction and the conclusion. It also addresses the problem, society’s position and action in the situation. “. The fact that it comes in such a wide variety makes it even more
