I must say that your thesis statement was link to the topic and essay paragraph. It also included the subject, the purpose, the focus and it indicated the expository strategy. In addition, the topic sentence also makes that three way link to the topic, topic in the thesis and outline. The topic sentence “Limited opportunities are frequently observed as a characteristic of racial discrimination” indicated that there will be some form of division by analysis of as it relates to the limited opportunities linking to racial discrimination. However, this point was not adequately developed in the body paragraph as most of your arguments were focus towards racial discrimination and not on the limited opportunities resulting from racial discrimination.
