Sara,
Thank you for sharing your paper.
I enjoyed reading your paper, and I would like to suggest you that your intro needs to be more effective, such as how women were defined at the levels of public and private in Athens.
Your thesis statement has a general idea. It might be more specific about the women’s life in Athens, and you could write the thesis about proving how and what women in Athens contributed to the Greek society.
The body of your paper looks good.
The journal articles are good in here. Your grammar and words’ usage are good.
Your bibliography and word count are perfect.
Overall, good luck in your future courses.
Rifat
Thank you for sharing your paper.
I enjoyed reading your paper, and I would like to suggest you that your intro needs to be more effective, such as how women were defined at the levels of public and private in Athens.
Your thesis statement has a general idea. It might be more specific about the women’s life in Athens, and you could write the thesis about proving how and what women in Athens contributed to the Greek society.
The body of your paper looks good.
The journal articles are good in here. Your grammar and words’ usage are good.
Your bibliography and word count are perfect.
Overall, good luck in your future courses.
Rifat