There’s a sci-fi subplot verbalized by Nichols. First, on a small note, Nichols tends to repeat himself that he has failed (he says this about three times). He relates that Ryan needs to save the world. Daryl finds some futuristic device and refers to “Starburst”. One understands it’s a set up for a possible future novel. Adding a sci-fi element is an artistic choice. It definitely can work in a novel, but if it’s going to be set up, then provide just a brief payoff near the end, even if it’s just a visual of the device pulsating and it seems to alert or communicate with Nichols. Nothing more needs to be done.
One area that would benefit from clarification is the subplot regarding Oliver Walters. There are two scenes in which characters discuss …show more content…
The humor in the story is nicely integrated. One enjoys some of Ryan’s witty lines and Nichols is an amusing character. Malcom also adds some comedic relief with his broken jaw and the running-gag about his credit cards.
The dialogue reveals information about the characters and their motivations. The voices are consistent to each character, but as noted, Indigo sounds more adult-like.
There’s a bit of repetitive dialogue: Maria seems to ask the question twice about Ryan killing her (to note the scenes with Maria and Erma do feel a bit long).
“Those weren’t threats. Those were promises,” sounds a bit cliché or outdated.
“Did you hear that?” “Hear what?” also feels a bit commonplace.
“Oops sorry,” does sound a bit flippant for the circumstances.
On page 169, Daryl seems to mention twice about calling off Mike.
In summary, the novel is highly original and there’s a strong hook.
One can see how this type of novel would appeal to the young adult audience.
ADAPTATION TO SCREENPLAY
This is definitely a novel that could be adapted into a compelling screenplay.
Supernatural thrillers are marketable in both the domestic and international marketplace.
The target audience is young
One area that would benefit from clarification is the subplot regarding Oliver Walters. There are two scenes in which characters discuss …show more content…
The humor in the story is nicely integrated. One enjoys some of Ryan’s witty lines and Nichols is an amusing character. Malcom also adds some comedic relief with his broken jaw and the running-gag about his credit cards.
The dialogue reveals information about the characters and their motivations. The voices are consistent to each character, but as noted, Indigo sounds more adult-like.
There’s a bit of repetitive dialogue: Maria seems to ask the question twice about Ryan killing her (to note the scenes with Maria and Erma do feel a bit long).
“Those weren’t threats. Those were promises,” sounds a bit cliché or outdated.
“Did you hear that?” “Hear what?” also feels a bit commonplace.
“Oops sorry,” does sound a bit flippant for the circumstances.
On page 169, Daryl seems to mention twice about calling off Mike.
In summary, the novel is highly original and there’s a strong hook.
One can see how this type of novel would appeal to the young adult audience.
ADAPTATION TO SCREENPLAY
This is definitely a novel that could be adapted into a compelling screenplay.
Supernatural thrillers are marketable in both the domestic and international marketplace.
The target audience is young