“The Trouble With Thoughts Related to Squirrels” in my opinion, demonstrated it’s engendered requirements for a narrative essay. Ethos, was used in the organization of events that are related to my experience with Attention Deficit Disorder, laying out sequentially and with clarity events that were pertinent to my disorder. For instance, how I experienced the testing to determine whether or not I had the disorder “Just you on a chair and the computer on a small desk the low hum of the fluorescent lights above the only noise.” A Simple description, enough to let the reader visualize what I was seeing. Continuing my focus on the narrative essay, which underwent a metamorphosis of the idea behind what I would be writing about. First the brainstorming,
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What signals and relays are used? Something that complicates the thought of why I do it. The organization of Pathos, Logos, and Ethos in most of my works were built upon personal tastes and responding to new input from learning as a student. I struggled most with avoiding the “known, knowns” I mean to say that my own conclusions are left out because I am already familiar with them. Just look at the first drafts of my “This I Believe” essay wherein I state in the opening lines that “The surety of my past..” It hurts to see it, of course the audience knows I have a past, I am here in the now, and would not even need to say it this way if I popped into existence from another reality. I instead chose to engage the reader by letting them see what I am trying to say “Imagine for a second” clearly a better lead in for the essay. In my multi-modal presentation I wanted to focus on the viewership as anyone who wished to participate. My idea was to show anyone that they could in fact draw by creating an interactive presentation that involved them just like the revision to my “this I …show more content…
As you noted “It’s not apparent where you sources were used” It was the “known, known” issue all over again, I know the information through observation, leading me to leave out external information that could have reinforced my thoughts.Refinement, to me is like ideation, I can come up with a better form of something over and over again I just need to keep doing it. It was apparent in all of my essays from start to finish going from “Sketching can be a thing that anyone can do, at any skill level, at any time in a person 's life.” Was the initial first line of my multi-modal essay that I eventually turned into “Okay, I admit that I do not sketch, which makes me cringe not having the habit, as I am enrolled in school for illustration, which, requires a lot of time fleshing out visual details.” It doesn’t have the same tone or focus and changes the whole momentum of what I am trying to say to my readers.The presentation also underwent many ideas as to what my experiment should address. I noted how much time I had and the realities of asking people to sit down with me so that I could sketch them, in my research I found that illustrators prefer not actually approaching the subject, instead they seek to capture the subject in their natural state as quickly as possible. For each essay I would try to keep away from overusing the same words at the beginning of a sentence, because, when we
What signals and relays are used? Something that complicates the thought of why I do it. The organization of Pathos, Logos, and Ethos in most of my works were built upon personal tastes and responding to new input from learning as a student. I struggled most with avoiding the “known, knowns” I mean to say that my own conclusions are left out because I am already familiar with them. Just look at the first drafts of my “This I Believe” essay wherein I state in the opening lines that “The surety of my past..” It hurts to see it, of course the audience knows I have a past, I am here in the now, and would not even need to say it this way if I popped into existence from another reality. I instead chose to engage the reader by letting them see what I am trying to say “Imagine for a second” clearly a better lead in for the essay. In my multi-modal presentation I wanted to focus on the viewership as anyone who wished to participate. My idea was to show anyone that they could in fact draw by creating an interactive presentation that involved them just like the revision to my “this I …show more content…
As you noted “It’s not apparent where you sources were used” It was the “known, known” issue all over again, I know the information through observation, leading me to leave out external information that could have reinforced my thoughts.Refinement, to me is like ideation, I can come up with a better form of something over and over again I just need to keep doing it. It was apparent in all of my essays from start to finish going from “Sketching can be a thing that anyone can do, at any skill level, at any time in a person 's life.” Was the initial first line of my multi-modal essay that I eventually turned into “Okay, I admit that I do not sketch, which makes me cringe not having the habit, as I am enrolled in school for illustration, which, requires a lot of time fleshing out visual details.” It doesn’t have the same tone or focus and changes the whole momentum of what I am trying to say to my readers.The presentation also underwent many ideas as to what my experiment should address. I noted how much time I had and the realities of asking people to sit down with me so that I could sketch them, in my research I found that illustrators prefer not actually approaching the subject, instead they seek to capture the subject in their natural state as quickly as possible. For each essay I would try to keep away from overusing the same words at the beginning of a sentence, because, when we