Best Writing
“The Places I Feel Free” is my best essay but yet best Personal Essay. I think this is my best essay because this line really stood out to me “...and the whipping sound of net when you swish it” I think this really shows the Word Choice in the paragraph. Also I think it shows the Sentence Fluency. “My favorite food out there is a turkey sandwich and sweet corn right out of the field the sweet corn taste like a pound of awesomes in my mouth.” I think it shows Idea and Content. Overall I think that “The Places I Feel Free” shows good Ideas and Content, Word Choice, and Sentence Fluency.
The Places I Feel FREE
The best memories I remember as a kid are at the farm. In my childhood I felt FREE at the farm, grandma’s house, and outside. …show more content…
Everyday we hear squeaking noise of my dump truck, sounds of the water hose, and the whipping sound of net when you swish it. When we go outside we 10’s, 20’s, and 30’s of cars pass by our house as me and my dad play. My dad cooks out every now and then and you can smell his amazing food. The taste of the food when it comes off the grill is delicious, my favorite personally is a sirloin steak.
When we go to my grandma’s house we always eat a meal at her house we always play with our two dogs. When we get there the dogs bark at us and the cars go by all day if we get a break of the cars it can be quiet. One day me and my sister were on the trampoline and I double bounce her and she flew threw the net and landed on her back. My grandma has a big field next to her house and it is a perfect spot to fly a kite on a windy day. My favorite food at my grandma’s house is grapes and watermelon straight out of the garden they are the most delicious and juiciest thing
“The Places I Feel Free” is my best essay but yet best Personal Essay. I think this is my best essay because this line really stood out to me “...and the whipping sound of net when you swish it” I think this really shows the Word Choice in the paragraph. Also I think it shows the Sentence Fluency. “My favorite food out there is a turkey sandwich and sweet corn right out of the field the sweet corn taste like a pound of awesomes in my mouth.” I think it shows Idea and Content. Overall I think that “The Places I Feel Free” shows good Ideas and Content, Word Choice, and Sentence Fluency.
The Places I Feel FREE
The best memories I remember as a kid are at the farm. In my childhood I felt FREE at the farm, grandma’s house, and outside. …show more content…
Everyday we hear squeaking noise of my dump truck, sounds of the water hose, and the whipping sound of net when you swish it. When we go outside we 10’s, 20’s, and 30’s of cars pass by our house as me and my dad play. My dad cooks out every now and then and you can smell his amazing food. The taste of the food when it comes off the grill is delicious, my favorite personally is a sirloin steak.
When we go to my grandma’s house we always eat a meal at her house we always play with our two dogs. When we get there the dogs bark at us and the cars go by all day if we get a break of the cars it can be quiet. One day me and my sister were on the trampoline and I double bounce her and she flew threw the net and landed on her back. My grandma has a big field next to her house and it is a perfect spot to fly a kite on a windy day. My favorite food at my grandma’s house is grapes and watermelon straight out of the garden they are the most delicious and juiciest thing