During my second and third drafts I went through the feedback I received and looked for more ways I could make my work scientific while still keeping the ideas that I originally had wrote about. I reworded some parts to make it sound less creative and more scientific. I added more information to places that I had left vague to create a sense of excitement. One part I had left vague was in my last couple sentences. I wrote that I had went from fearing blood to absolutely loving it with no explanation on how I got over my fear. I left this vague in order to create some surprise and excitement. Although this can be interesting, it does not follow APA guidelines. Scientific writing should not be vague because it will cause people to interpret their own thoughts. In reviewing my draft, I added in more of a connection between my change thoughts about blood. Through writing this essay, I found that there are more ways to write than the way that i was taught in high school. This essay helped me to learn the difference between creative writing, and scientific …show more content…
Although it wasn't the perfect essay, overall, I think it was my best one. I wrote about cultural diversity in the healthcare setting. This is something that I am very passionate about so I think that I had a little bit of insight on the topic before I began my essay. Before I began in the x-ray program at MCHP, I did not think about the institutionalized racism and cultural differences in the healthcare setting. I knew about it outside of healthcare, but never took the time to recognize that people are getting worse healthcare in an institution just because of their ethnic background or because of how they look. It is very important for healthcare professionals to look at everyone the same and be open to different cultural backgrounds and ideas. When writing this essay I was able to focus on cultural differences and the negatives of living in a place like America when you are an immigrant. I was able to edit my writing based on the feedback that was given by my peers, which was not very much. I had even less to edit than I did on my previous