Learning in life varies for everyone, so it makes sense as to why we have schools that teach kids from childhood all the way to adulthood. Just one semester of school can make a difference in your education as long as you pay attention in class. Throughout Fall of 2016 at College of the Sequoias, I have been taught many new strategies on how to write well thought-out essays when it comes to arguing about relevant topics. I can tell based on comparing my first essay to my final essay that my writing is a lot more coherent and understandable. Throughout this entire course of English 1, I have been aiming for an A as my final grade and the competence in my methods of research and reading, essay composition, and polishing and formatting can prove
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When you are part of a minority opinion, it takes a lot to get the larger crowd convinced that your point of view on an argument is the most reasonable one. That 's why my evidence about how " 'Only 23 percent of the 1.3 million high-school graduates of 2007 who took the ACT examination were ready for college level work ' (2)" is really important when claiming that a diploma in liberal arts is useless ("The Uselessness of Liberal Arts" 2). When you get statistics involved based on reliable and relevant sources, you have solid evidence that can 't be denied by groups that disagree with your opinion. My competence in finding sufficient evidence for my second essay is what keeps the argument going as its relevance will let people know that I am aware of what I am arguing about. Now I can gain my audience 's full attention and respect as they evidence like this will let them understand that what I am doing is logical and useful. I begin analyze the evidence by saying, "we can say that a majority of students attending college will struggle as they were not prepared for their new education" ("The Uselessness of Liberal Arts" 2). I can now let my readers know that I am aware of what the evidence means and understand its purpose so my readers can follow along with what is going on in my …show more content…
My vague wording is similar to what I did in my essay 2 conclusion as mentioned previously. However, it doesn 't work in the context of this essay as I have not given all of the information my readers need to know about the argument unlike essay 2 where I am concluding the entire essay with a final general thought about the topic at hand. This made my point of view on the argument confusing and not straight forward. I changed my wording and specified the "peaceful" approach as an approach where we form "a ceasefire or peace treaty." ("A Peaceful War" 2). My Improvements in writing have made me realize that when trying to write an argumentative paper, I can 't be vague to my audience when stating my opinion. I need to be straightforward and specific, otherwise my competence is nonexistent when polishing my
When you are part of a minority opinion, it takes a lot to get the larger crowd convinced that your point of view on an argument is the most reasonable one. That 's why my evidence about how " 'Only 23 percent of the 1.3 million high-school graduates of 2007 who took the ACT examination were ready for college level work ' (2)" is really important when claiming that a diploma in liberal arts is useless ("The Uselessness of Liberal Arts" 2). When you get statistics involved based on reliable and relevant sources, you have solid evidence that can 't be denied by groups that disagree with your opinion. My competence in finding sufficient evidence for my second essay is what keeps the argument going as its relevance will let people know that I am aware of what I am arguing about. Now I can gain my audience 's full attention and respect as they evidence like this will let them understand that what I am doing is logical and useful. I begin analyze the evidence by saying, "we can say that a majority of students attending college will struggle as they were not prepared for their new education" ("The Uselessness of Liberal Arts" 2). I can now let my readers know that I am aware of what the evidence means and understand its purpose so my readers can follow along with what is going on in my …show more content…
My vague wording is similar to what I did in my essay 2 conclusion as mentioned previously. However, it doesn 't work in the context of this essay as I have not given all of the information my readers need to know about the argument unlike essay 2 where I am concluding the entire essay with a final general thought about the topic at hand. This made my point of view on the argument confusing and not straight forward. I changed my wording and specified the "peaceful" approach as an approach where we form "a ceasefire or peace treaty." ("A Peaceful War" 2). My Improvements in writing have made me realize that when trying to write an argumentative paper, I can 't be vague to my audience when stating my opinion. I need to be straightforward and specific, otherwise my competence is nonexistent when polishing my