Similarly, they both contain extraneous information that is not necessary to the paper mainly because the writer is trying to fill a page requirement. Imagine a taxi driver taking you to your destination, rather then going the path less traveled, the taxi driver takes you on a detour that is completely unnecessary, pointless, and redundant. Ultimately, you will owe more money to the taxi driver and be frustrated. Dead language, along with pretentious diction has the same effect on the reader as the taxi driver has on his patron. They are both unsatisfing. They crave something more, something genuine. Throughout my essays thus far, I have become susceptible to the ladder. For example, in my Personal Experience Narrative, my goal was to make an impact on my first assignment. In the 3rd paragraph I wrote, “The unabridged serenity was essential and necessary to my cognitive growth for future endeavors.” In my haste to make a profound statement in my writing, I managed to create a confusing voice that did not sound aesthetically pleasing to the reader. In reality, a better statement would be “The unabridged serenity was essential for my growth as a person.” This statement still uses tier 2 words, but it is clearer, and more …show more content…
Struggling to lengthen my essay I stated, “The detrimental effects and ramifications of pursuing to keep the beer ban does not justly correlate with society’s moral code of ethics, this inevitably will hinder the growth and development of the community at large.” This senseless, obscure statement contains very little sustenance, and rather all jargon. The use of dead language creates an illusion of intelligence, but can be easily deciphered by a knowledgeable professor. Conversely, a more concise statement would be, “The detrimental effects of keeping the beer ban would inevitably hinder the growth of communities across the