Shoe Shopping Process Analysis

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The clock ticks slowly as eight hour draws ever closer to the end. The room is filled only with the faint sounds of breathing as a cool breeze flows in from the door. Resting in my chair, I begin to think about the past semester of College Writing and my growth as a writer. Over the months of being in the class I have grown tremendously as I have accomplished all the Student Learning Outcomes set before me. Being in the class has taught me about how to keep my essay focused on one topic, making it more engaging to my reader. I also learned how the writing process is a major part in making a good essay and I used it to brainstorm and revise my essays into masterpieces. Vivid verbs are also now used in all of my essays to help get my point across …show more content…
The essay starts of on topic in the introduction when I explain my trip into the store and why I am there. I then go on to explain my criteria of fit, comfort, style, and price which would keep me on track for the essay. Each criterion has its own paragraph where I explain my reasoning for picking it and which brand of shoe wins in that category. I do not discuss anything in the essay, but the criteria that helps keep the focus on track and easier to follow along with. My clear focus in the essay helps the reader to better understand why I choose the shoe I …show more content…
The Reid textbook says that a well-developed essay is where the writer shows what’s going on and not just coming out and saying it. The essay, “Tangled in the Web,” from the Beyond the Blank Page packet shows this technique nicely in the beginning paragraph. He starts off with, “I was greeted by the blazing, early morning sun which was climbing unrelentingly upward into the sky. It hung over the tree tops casting off the few remaining shadows of the dying night.” The author could have just stated that the sun was rising, but using show, don’t tell the reader is able to picture the scene in their minds more clearly. This technique is hard to master, but once it is put to use in an essay, it makes the essay flow much better for the

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