THE SUMMER OF SINNEH WILSON is a character driven drama of self-discovery. The story is driven by solid themes about trust and second chances. The story is also driven by an emotional goal versus a physical or external goal. The story is more about the emotional journey of two, compelling women.
The structure features two storylines. The present day story is about Cynthia and her inner goal to overcome an abusive boyfriend and to reconnect with her father. The second storyline takes place in the past, told in several flashbacks, and it highlights the journey of Sinneh (Cynthia’s mother) and her journey with forbidden love and making life choices. The two worlds eventually collide.
The inciting event is the finding of the mother’s diary. …show more content…
This should be trimmed. In addition, one doesn’t feel that there’s strong enough resolution between Cynthia and Kevin. It’s her brothers who solve the issue, not Cynthia. It might have worked more effectively if she confronted Kevin, perhaps with her brothers there, as support to show family unity. The concern, however, about this subplot is that it’s not fully developed and so the audience has very little emotional investment in the storyline.
It might have been more effective if Cynthia was in a troubled marriage and she didn’t know whether to stay with her husband or not and then at the end makes a decision based on her mother’s story. The domestic abuse story is very serious and feels too heavy and just not given the attention it requires. A troubled marriage would also fit more appropriately with her mother’s backstory.
The ending with her meeting her father works. Make sure she has the necklace with her. The ending doesn’t require dialogue. Malik can just simply open the door and maybe the audience doesn’t even see him, but just the look on Cynthia’s face or the sunshine on her face.
The characters are all complex and rich. They are compelling and have strong inner conflict. It’s easy to care about the characters and root for
The structure features two storylines. The present day story is about Cynthia and her inner goal to overcome an abusive boyfriend and to reconnect with her father. The second storyline takes place in the past, told in several flashbacks, and it highlights the journey of Sinneh (Cynthia’s mother) and her journey with forbidden love and making life choices. The two worlds eventually collide.
The inciting event is the finding of the mother’s diary. …show more content…
This should be trimmed. In addition, one doesn’t feel that there’s strong enough resolution between Cynthia and Kevin. It’s her brothers who solve the issue, not Cynthia. It might have worked more effectively if she confronted Kevin, perhaps with her brothers there, as support to show family unity. The concern, however, about this subplot is that it’s not fully developed and so the audience has very little emotional investment in the storyline.
It might have been more effective if Cynthia was in a troubled marriage and she didn’t know whether to stay with her husband or not and then at the end makes a decision based on her mother’s story. The domestic abuse story is very serious and feels too heavy and just not given the attention it requires. A troubled marriage would also fit more appropriately with her mother’s backstory.
The ending with her meeting her father works. Make sure she has the necklace with her. The ending doesn’t require dialogue. Malik can just simply open the door and maybe the audience doesn’t even see him, but just the look on Cynthia’s face or the sunshine on her face.
The characters are all complex and rich. They are compelling and have strong inner conflict. It’s easy to care about the characters and root for