Synthesis Essay On Social Class

This essay is a very unsuccessful. The writer often jumps around from subject to subject and does not stick to their theme of social class. Their thesis was that “social class plays a huge role in society” and “determines how people get treated”. This is very broad topic and is common sense. The writer tries to tie identity into social class but is very unsuccessful in doing so. Instead of explaining more on how they correlate, the writer discusses their opinion of why they shouldn’t correlate. The writer also did not have the essay essentials, nor did they score well on the grading rubric.
The writer did not display all the essay essentials. The essay was poorly organized. It jumped around from topic to topic and the transitions didn’t connect each paragraph with the next. It is stated in the essentials that “you”, “I”, & “we” should be avoided, however the writer uses these words very often throughout the essay, making it too personal. The conclusion didn’t do a great job of tying things up and was more of a personal opinion of social classes. The quotations used were not properly cited in the essay. For one of them, they didn’t …show more content…
The writer had a very broad thesis and theme. They didn’t give enough support to their thesis and gave more opinions than support. They were repetitive that social class identifies you but didn’t really describe how it effects a person, and instead gave an opinion on the subject, such as, “we should have the right and opportunity to define ourselves”. The organization would be scored as average or poor. They jumped around from topic to topic in paragraphs and there was either no transition or the transition was very poor. The expression also would have been average or poor. They were very redundant throughout their essay. Each paragraph talks about pretty much the same things. The mechanics also would have been average or poor. There were many mistakes in grammar and punctuation in this