Spanking: Relationship Between Children And Parents

I really liked the way you compared the analogy of a clay artisan and the relationship between children and parents. I agree with you about the fact that spanking can be adopted by the child who has been spanked and repeated this later in his/her own children. I also agree with you that spanking affects child's behavior and social interactions and that spanking should be avoided at all cost.

I think you need to work more in your conclusion to improve your work. A good conclusion should restate your thesis, summarize your main points and leave a final impression on the reader.
In your conclusion, you could restate your thesis by saying that spanking is bad for children because it affects them physically and mentally. You could summarize