Snail's Relationship

I racked my brain, repeatedly, trying to find ways to improve this. The conflict was definitely lacking. In our Character Creation class, we were told to think more about our antagonist, and I didn’t really do that. Snail is a cool senior, but his skills in class are lacking. This is why his relationship with Lyla originally formed. I took this into consideration during my final revision. She is leaving and Snail knows that. He is paranoid and insecure about his life without her, so he lashes out. This is the template for the breakup and the conflict.

Originally I wrote that the hug was nearly seen by Snail, which gives Lyla the impetus to break up with him. Now, Snail witnesses the hug and his anger bubbles to the surface. I conglomerated