A hopeful writer’s dream is fraught by personal troubles and his feelings of obligation to care for his struggling family.
BRIEF SYNOPSIS
In a small fishing village in Nova Scotia, a young, hopeful Callum idolizes his fisherman father. An essay about his father highlights Callum’s hidden talent as a writer and his teacher encourages Callum to follow his passion and to write for others.
Unfortunately, life hinders Callum’s dream when his alcoholic father quits his job and the family is forced to struggle, as the town bully Menzie and his son, Menzie Jr. extort money from the villagers. When Callum’s father becomes sick, his mother battles for the family’s survival, but she succumbs to the pressure and begins to drink too. Callum’s only solace is his childhood friend Catriona and the village lighthouse …show more content…
They are easy to like and care about, but they don’t feel like they have resolution. They disappear around pages 72 and 74. It would be nice if they had a stronger closure.
The audience never connects with Tom and his family because they are introduced too late.
The dialogue has strengths and weaknesses. Overall, the voices reflect the personalities of the characters, but on the other hand the dialogue is rather straightforward. It could be sharper with more subtext. There’s some repetitive dialogue mainly between Annie and Andrew. She complains about him and he responds.
Overall, the tension feels mild because the audience doesn’t know what to root for due to the lack of an external goal. Again, it only at the end that Callum becomes more focused on saving the village and then the audience roots for him.
The script is professionally formatted, although some the descriptions are a bit wordy and tend to tell or explain information rather than show.
In summary, it’s challenging to adapt from a novel. Focus the script. Create a stronger goal. Give the audience a true emotional journey to take with the
BRIEF SYNOPSIS
In a small fishing village in Nova Scotia, a young, hopeful Callum idolizes his fisherman father. An essay about his father highlights Callum’s hidden talent as a writer and his teacher encourages Callum to follow his passion and to write for others.
Unfortunately, life hinders Callum’s dream when his alcoholic father quits his job and the family is forced to struggle, as the town bully Menzie and his son, Menzie Jr. extort money from the villagers. When Callum’s father becomes sick, his mother battles for the family’s survival, but she succumbs to the pressure and begins to drink too. Callum’s only solace is his childhood friend Catriona and the village lighthouse …show more content…
They are easy to like and care about, but they don’t feel like they have resolution. They disappear around pages 72 and 74. It would be nice if they had a stronger closure.
The audience never connects with Tom and his family because they are introduced too late.
The dialogue has strengths and weaknesses. Overall, the voices reflect the personalities of the characters, but on the other hand the dialogue is rather straightforward. It could be sharper with more subtext. There’s some repetitive dialogue mainly between Annie and Andrew. She complains about him and he responds.
Overall, the tension feels mild because the audience doesn’t know what to root for due to the lack of an external goal. Again, it only at the end that Callum becomes more focused on saving the village and then the audience roots for him.
The script is professionally formatted, although some the descriptions are a bit wordy and tend to tell or explain information rather than show.
In summary, it’s challenging to adapt from a novel. Focus the script. Create a stronger goal. Give the audience a true emotional journey to take with the