I’ve carefully read ‘Saying Goodbye To London’ and enjoyed it truly. I believe this book has potential and would do well in the market once edited and finalised. ‘Saying Goodbye To London’, follows Francis, a 15- year old shy boy who meets confident 16-year-old girl, Sawyer at a part. Sparks Fly between them and she gets pregnant. Now they must deal with both a new relationship and a baby. This story also deals with concepts such as loss, sexuality and family. Francis has a lot of growing up to do and is forced to do it all at once. When Sawyer decides to give the baby up for adoption, the two must now follow a proper method with the help of their friends and an adoption agency in finding the suitable family for London. ‘Saying Goodbye To London’ is a beautiful and
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Thus, bringing up the point that in few places we get too much while in other places, not enough. The author gives us fair accounts of the pregnancy from morning sickness to birth, but she leaves out details that could help develop the opening and leading up to her finding out. We’ve been hinted that the two did not use protection a few times, while in another place it says twice. Like in another place where it is mentioned that Sawyer is sixteen yet at one place Francis addresses and makes a comment about her being fifteen. This kind of confusing details could throw a reader off. An effective way to work with this is to make an outline of key details needed throughout the book to maintain consistency.
Finally, the last thing that I would like to shine a light on is the formatting issues within the book, but it is not beyond repair. One through read through and a substantive edit would strengthen up the story and do both the plot and the characters a good benefit. That said, the time needed to complete this edit and polishing of the story would take at least two weeks before it would be ready for
Thus, bringing up the point that in few places we get too much while in other places, not enough. The author gives us fair accounts of the pregnancy from morning sickness to birth, but she leaves out details that could help develop the opening and leading up to her finding out. We’ve been hinted that the two did not use protection a few times, while in another place it says twice. Like in another place where it is mentioned that Sawyer is sixteen yet at one place Francis addresses and makes a comment about her being fifteen. This kind of confusing details could throw a reader off. An effective way to work with this is to make an outline of key details needed throughout the book to maintain consistency.
Finally, the last thing that I would like to shine a light on is the formatting issues within the book, but it is not beyond repair. One through read through and a substantive edit would strengthen up the story and do both the plot and the characters a good benefit. That said, the time needed to complete this edit and polishing of the story would take at least two weeks before it would be ready for