Hi *|FNAME|*,
Thanks for signing up for a Resume Review with me. The following are suggestions that I believe you should make to better show off your skills, experience, and value. The changes you should make are below:
First off, I like your summary statement ("Driven, motivated, and experience . . .") and the professional profile; however, you don't need both. The professional profile section is a great summary in itself., but the summary doesn't say anything that the professional profile doesn't cover.
For your experience at Sunquest Information Systems, the third bullet point ("Team also leads all zones in FY16 . . .) can be combined with the second bullet point, directly above it. You can rewrite it as "Team lead all zones in Clinical Pathology, …show more content…
I don't think that is necessary. Also, the second to last bullet has an error. The line starts out with "drove increase." You can remove drove and leave it as "increased sales . . ."
For your experience at SmartPACS, you are using the same verb, "developed," too many times. Try to mix it up. For example, try "created a marketing plan and strategy to bring product to market."
For you experience at North Atlantic Networks LLC, the first 3 bullet points don't offer much value. They talk about the company, but they don't really offer much about what you did for the company. I'd say remove those and have the 4th bullet point, "grew to be 3rd . . . " For the bullet point, "Annual Sales of approx. $6m," try to describe what you did to get to $6m in sales. Also, try using other verbs besides "developed."
For North Atlantic Imaging, the first 3 bullet points don't offer much value. They talk about the company, but they don't really offer much about what you did for the company. I'd say remove those and have the 4th bullet point, "Awarded #1 Sales . . ." as you first bullet point. It is a strong opener.
For your experience at E.M. Parker
Thanks for signing up for a Resume Review with me. The following are suggestions that I believe you should make to better show off your skills, experience, and value. The changes you should make are below:
First off, I like your summary statement ("Driven, motivated, and experience . . .") and the professional profile; however, you don't need both. The professional profile section is a great summary in itself., but the summary doesn't say anything that the professional profile doesn't cover.
For your experience at Sunquest Information Systems, the third bullet point ("Team also leads all zones in FY16 . . .) can be combined with the second bullet point, directly above it. You can rewrite it as "Team lead all zones in Clinical Pathology, …show more content…
I don't think that is necessary. Also, the second to last bullet has an error. The line starts out with "drove increase." You can remove drove and leave it as "increased sales . . ."
For your experience at SmartPACS, you are using the same verb, "developed," too many times. Try to mix it up. For example, try "created a marketing plan and strategy to bring product to market."
For you experience at North Atlantic Networks LLC, the first 3 bullet points don't offer much value. They talk about the company, but they don't really offer much about what you did for the company. I'd say remove those and have the 4th bullet point, "grew to be 3rd . . . " For the bullet point, "Annual Sales of approx. $6m," try to describe what you did to get to $6m in sales. Also, try using other verbs besides "developed."
For North Atlantic Imaging, the first 3 bullet points don't offer much value. They talk about the company, but they don't really offer much about what you did for the company. I'd say remove those and have the 4th bullet point, "Awarded #1 Sales . . ." as you first bullet point. It is a strong opener.
For your experience at E.M. Parker