The magnificent Garden:
Staring down from the balcony, the captivating view of the garden left me in awe. The whole sight portrays the image of a fairytale. The color and the shades of the sky seemed to be a part of a beautiful painting stretched across. The clouds were as fluffy as cotton candy. The milky white light from the moon made them more prominent as they changed from one form to another as if trying to tell the story of their own. The smooth paved walkway leads to the glorious pond. The moonlight bounces off the glistening water making it shine. Blooming white lily pads fill the pond making it a breathtaking sight. The moonlight plays its part to highlight the beauty of this glorious pond. The soft warm summer breeze made everything shimmer and …show more content…
In the positive scenario of the garden, I mention “Staring down from the balcony, the captivating view of the garden left me in awe.” This statement tells the reader about the direction of rest of the paragraph and what to expect next. Similarly, in the negative description I start which, “Staring down from the balcony, the hideous view of the garden left me in disgust.” This statement is an image that the rest of the description would be an unpleasant one.
Selection/omission of details
The tool that I used next from the Writer’s Toolbox was “selection/omission of details.” In the positive description, I go on saying that “The color and the shades of the sky seemed to be a part of a beautiful painting stretched across” and “The moonlight lit up the whole garden making everything shine like jewels” by intentionally leaving them out in my negative descriptions. Similarly, I left the description of the evening in the garden “The darkness of the night made everything terrifying.” in my positive paragraph.
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Staring down from the balcony, the captivating view of the garden left me in awe. The whole sight portrays the image of a fairytale. The color and the shades of the sky seemed to be a part of a beautiful painting stretched across. The clouds were as fluffy as cotton candy. The milky white light from the moon made them more prominent as they changed from one form to another as if trying to tell the story of their own. The smooth paved walkway leads to the glorious pond. The moonlight bounces off the glistening water making it shine. Blooming white lily pads fill the pond making it a breathtaking sight. The moonlight plays its part to highlight the beauty of this glorious pond. The soft warm summer breeze made everything shimmer and …show more content…
In the positive scenario of the garden, I mention “Staring down from the balcony, the captivating view of the garden left me in awe.” This statement tells the reader about the direction of rest of the paragraph and what to expect next. Similarly, in the negative description I start which, “Staring down from the balcony, the hideous view of the garden left me in disgust.” This statement is an image that the rest of the description would be an unpleasant one.
Selection/omission of details
The tool that I used next from the Writer’s Toolbox was “selection/omission of details.” In the positive description, I go on saying that “The color and the shades of the sky seemed to be a part of a beautiful painting stretched across” and “The moonlight lit up the whole garden making everything shine like jewels” by intentionally leaving them out in my negative descriptions. Similarly, I left the description of the evening in the garden “The darkness of the night made everything terrifying.” in my positive paragraph.
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