I didn’t have a thesis in my original exam draft, because I didn't know what a rhetorical analysis was. The lack of a thesis made it very hard to properly organize my essay. My new thesis is "In his passage he focuses on three states of mind that he attributes to the existence of slaves. These three states of mind are happiness, loneliness, and anger and are chosen because they are easily relatable and make the audience more open to his story." This new thesis is stronger because it directly adresses the prompt and provides a foundation on which to write my essay.In my exam draft od the essay I claimed that Douglass used the ships as a symbol, and I failed to define exactly what he was using the ships to symbolize. The lack of clarification
