REVENGE is a dramatic, medieval action script. The story offers an intriguing world with warriors, Kings, witches, betrayal, forbidden love, and murder. There’s a solid theme about revenge that is well interwoven into the overall plot.
Revenge stories are a tried and true concept. They are always a good framework for conflict, tension, and character transformation. Medieval stories also offer a world that is well liked. The idea of two families in conflict with each other is always a smart story choice. In fact, the idea that the son and daughter of two rival families fall in love helps create solid conflict.
However, while the theme is effective, the overall presentation and script has several areas that are worth discussing.
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The first act sets up the goal for Kolaib and Salem to save Galeelah from King Hassan. They devise a plan to kill him and take over the Kingdom. This is accomplished in the first act.
Then the direction of the story changes and it becomes a story about the conspiracy to kill Kolaib and Salem. However, the story changes directions again with the introduction of Aisha and her need for revenge. Then the goal changes when Omar vows to stop the war. Finally, late in the structure, a new character, Suzan, is introduced. While it 's actually an intriguing part of the story, it comes too late and it’s never fully developed.
Overall, the lack of a consistent hero with a strong goal makes for an ineffective structure. Consider focusing more on Omar from the first act. He’s the most relatable and likable. He’s in a tough situation caught between his father’s need for revenge and his love for Layla. This can make for a powerful storyline, but it needs to be clearly established in the first act. Hence, tell the story from the point of view of Omar versus any of the other characters. Develop his romance with Layla and convince the audience they are in love and that the conflict will pull them apart. This will create stronger anticipation and tension. It will also define the
Revenge stories are a tried and true concept. They are always a good framework for conflict, tension, and character transformation. Medieval stories also offer a world that is well liked. The idea of two families in conflict with each other is always a smart story choice. In fact, the idea that the son and daughter of two rival families fall in love helps create solid conflict.
However, while the theme is effective, the overall presentation and script has several areas that are worth discussing.
The story …show more content…
The first act sets up the goal for Kolaib and Salem to save Galeelah from King Hassan. They devise a plan to kill him and take over the Kingdom. This is accomplished in the first act.
Then the direction of the story changes and it becomes a story about the conspiracy to kill Kolaib and Salem. However, the story changes directions again with the introduction of Aisha and her need for revenge. Then the goal changes when Omar vows to stop the war. Finally, late in the structure, a new character, Suzan, is introduced. While it 's actually an intriguing part of the story, it comes too late and it’s never fully developed.
Overall, the lack of a consistent hero with a strong goal makes for an ineffective structure. Consider focusing more on Omar from the first act. He’s the most relatable and likable. He’s in a tough situation caught between his father’s need for revenge and his love for Layla. This can make for a powerful storyline, but it needs to be clearly established in the first act. Hence, tell the story from the point of view of Omar versus any of the other characters. Develop his romance with Layla and convince the audience they are in love and that the conflict will pull them apart. This will create stronger anticipation and tension. It will also define the