I have often found myself attempting to formulate a thesis, knowing what my objective for the paper is, and yet, unable to form the sentence that could possibly set the tone for the rest of it. It is sometimes said that it should raise questions, allow for discussion, and must always summarize the entire paper in a sentence or two. I may have all of my ideas, and what points I intend to make written out, but I still struggle to form a proper thesis. It has likely been ingrained into me that one must have a thesis, and in some cases, an introductory paragraph before beginning the rest of the essay, and I have noticed that because of my difficulty with writing a thesis statement, I am sometimes …show more content…
One thing I noticed in this essay, was that I could not think of many synonyms for ‘elder’, or ‘relative’, that would have the correct connotation, and as a result I saw a repetition, and upon reading my essay out loud to other students, I again noticed this repetition. I have not encountered this problem often, as I am generally able to use a wider variety of diction, whether through words that I remember off the top of my head, or with the aid of a thesaurus. In this paper, I was unsure of synonyms that I could use, and therefore did not want to risk changing the words; many of which were recommended I recognized had a different connotation, anyways. Because of this, I am somewhat unsatisfied with the end result, but I preferred to remain with words that I know have the correct connotation, knowing that it was …show more content…
For my last essay, “A Nursing Home or a Relative’s Home?”, three other students read my essay, noting that a word had accidentally been left out of my essay, and that I had written it in a very neutral manner, as that was what I had understood I should do. Because they realized this, I was able to verify in what manner it should be written. After this, I take into consideration others’ comments, and go through a printed copy with a pen of a bright, easily identified color. For this essay, I read through a printed copy of my essay twice, on different days. On each day that I revised, and edited, my essay, I used a different color; red on the first day, and blue the second day. In revising a printed version of my paper, I was able to see small errors, such as a missing comma, or words that I decided to remove, more