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In this essay, I also give recommendations for the best places to visit for those who would want to visit Panama Beach. My purpose in this article is to make the reader see the importance of visiting Panama beach. The fact that I have the first-hand experience makes it easier for me to explain my points in a way that is interesting to the reader. In the first two essays, I realized that there were a lot of grammatical mistakes, wordiness, and lack of coherence. I corrected these errors to improve the quality of the essays. Moreover, to ensure that there is coherence, I used transitional words. Furthermore, as a way of reducing wordiness, I made the sentences shorter so that it is easier for the reader to understand the …show more content…
In this essay, I try to bring out a picture of a lack of knowledge and the benefits of knowing something. Also, I highlight the different avenues of gaining information and try to explain to my readers how I learned from a young age the importance of budgeting my money. First, I learned from parents, then from trial and error and finally, I had to attend a class so as to increase my knowledge. Without proper budgeting, you may end up spending money on useless things. The most important information from this essay is that people learn from observation and research. With the advancements in information technology, one can easily get information about anything in this world. For instance, I have done a lot of online research about