Before the course began I thought I could write an essay in a couple of hours and I would not need to do any major changes. Now I have started to take my time whenever I have to write a long essay. Writing is something extraordinary because it can be used in so many ways. From the elements used to persuade the reader to using facts and evidence to prove an argument. One thing that I learned is that writing can be a fun process especially when it is a topic is that I enjoy. I found it easier to write about FIFA and the NIKE essay because I already had prior knowledge of the topic and was interested in the material. Whenever I wrote essays without these aspects it was challenging to continue writing because I grew bored easily. Writing is a
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One of the main changes I have seen is using the word “you” less in my essays. I would often change point of views in my essays by habit. An example of this was in an essay where the class had to compare and contrast Bentley University and their high school. I wrote “we are on the 4.0 scale and in AP classes you can get up to a 5.0 GPA” (Fuentes 1). In the next essays I had completely stopped using the word you. I would rewrite the sentence and instead of using the word “you” I would say “At my high school the school is on the 4.0 scale and the AP classes give students an opportunity to earn up to a 5.0 GPA.” I also see shifts in my writing in the logic of my essays. At the beginning of my essay I would leave holes in my essay. The sentence would not explain well enough or it was too simple and immediately went on to a next sentence. One essay where I did this was during the comparing and contrasting essay when I said “At Ramona they offer the traditional courses to graduate with several AP classes. At Bentley pluses or minus can lower or raise your GPA” (Fuentes 2). These two sentences have no connection which affects the logic and flow of the essay. In Long Essay #two I write “Public schools get money from the government and it allows them to get more money to invest in stuff for their students,
One of the main changes I have seen is using the word “you” less in my essays. I would often change point of views in my essays by habit. An example of this was in an essay where the class had to compare and contrast Bentley University and their high school. I wrote “we are on the 4.0 scale and in AP classes you can get up to a 5.0 GPA” (Fuentes 1). In the next essays I had completely stopped using the word you. I would rewrite the sentence and instead of using the word “you” I would say “At my high school the school is on the 4.0 scale and the AP classes give students an opportunity to earn up to a 5.0 GPA.” I also see shifts in my writing in the logic of my essays. At the beginning of my essay I would leave holes in my essay. The sentence would not explain well enough or it was too simple and immediately went on to a next sentence. One essay where I did this was during the comparing and contrasting essay when I said “At Ramona they offer the traditional courses to graduate with several AP classes. At Bentley pluses or minus can lower or raise your GPA” (Fuentes 2). These two sentences have no connection which affects the logic and flow of the essay. In Long Essay #two I write “Public schools get money from the government and it allows them to get more money to invest in stuff for their students,