I approached this paper differently, and used more preparation and writing strategies. I used an outline, a throwaway draft, a first draft, and a final draft. I used a brainstorming session as well before starting my writing. I made careful use of the appeals in this essay and made sure to indicate where I was using them within the …show more content…
Whereas I had thought I had written a fantastic paper, when I received it back, I was shown that there were holes in my work. For example, I did not use logos in my writing as well as I thought I had. Upon review, I realized that I did not use specific examples of facts and statements. I tried to use statements instead, which did not exactly work. My thesis and paragraph structure and transitions needed work as well. In my thesis I said that Ms. Dillard was trying to convince her readers to “live like weasels”, which I did not properly define. In my revision of the piece, I made sure to make it clearer what I was trying to say within my thesis. By “live like weasels”, I meant to live wild and free, with little care of consequence. My paragraph structure and transitions were far weaker than I had thought. Upon reading my instructor’s comments and feedback, I realized that my paragraphs stopped and started awkwardly and frequently, and I did not connect them in a fluid manner. I chose to remedy this in my revision, and I believe that it made my paper flow more